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Post by blackbanner » Wed Aug 11, 2010 11:48 pm

The spaces where your fingers once fit,
Now feel so empty: devoid of life.
My heart sinks at first, but then it dawns
On me, I'm stronger without the strife.

I thought once I loved you,
But time has shown me,
You were never the one.
You never let it be.

My soul has found rest:
Your departure was hard,
Now it feels distant,
Time to turn over a new card.

I no longer care for you,
Never again shall I give
You my heart. This is the end,
Time to live.



First write in a couple years..kinda rusty. Pounded out from the heart, please feel free to share your thoughts.
"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
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Re: Recently Single

Post by xmartinx=] » Sun Aug 15, 2010 4:23 pm

yes yes awesome, the card part adds to the sense of love and fate and fortune but the last paragraph sealed it as the enjaambamont on my heart suggested two things to me. beautiful work
thanks for reading!!! =] " ill never strafe, ill never wonder, all absence does is make the heart grow fonder "

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Re: Recently Single

Post by blackbanner » Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:18 pm

Thanks so much for your praise!
And my drink I raise,
In your honor:
I thought for sure this was a goner.
"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
BlackBanner

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Re: Recently Single

Post by Jadynara » Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:04 pm

this is a really great piece! awesome work.... not so rusty it's good writing and you can definitely tell it's from teh heart reminds me of some pieces i have written after losing something i thought was at one point good for me. The decision to move on and LIVE is sometimes the hardest one for us to make after sharing our lives with someone else.

thanks for sharing!

Jady :computer:
So we're lost, at least we've found each other. Take my hand, if we can't find our way out of the dark, we can make our own light. - Nicole M. Goretzke 2011

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Re: Recently Single

Post by xmartinx=] » Thu Sep 09, 2010 2:11 pm

i like your style of reply,
as i see your talent soar and fly,
atop the treetops and a cloud,
the author of this must be very proud =]
thanks for reading!!! =] " ill never strafe, ill never wonder, all absence does is make the heart grow fonder "

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Re: Recently Single

Post by moonflower » Tue Oct 26, 2010 9:30 pm

sometimes we have to just cut the ties and move on..your poem captures the pain and the reality of that perfectly!.. :thumbsup:
inside each soul there is music...let the music play..

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Re: Recently Single

Post by xmartinx=] » Thu Nov 04, 2010 4:05 am

again i read and again im amazed. very clear form of poetry and the content really depicts the feelings of a sengle persion, their state of mind and attitude toward the world. very nice =]
thanks for reading!!! =] " ill never strafe, ill never wonder, all absence does is make the heart grow fonder "

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Re: Recently Single

Post by Debbie » Mon May 30, 2011 2:55 am

thanks for sharing, I guess we have all gone through this struggle at one time or another...you expressed yourself well, and we all move on eventually even though the pain is so hard to deal with at the time of the break up..... :thumbsup:
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Re: Recently Single

Post by Black Star Shine » Wed Jun 01, 2011 8:37 am

Awesome :) I found that I could relate to it in my own way.

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Re: Recently Single

Post by buggles » Wed Nov 16, 2011 10:25 pm

nice piece written from the heart, I likeee

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