twilight upon
the bed
candlelight shifting
the dead
memories sifting
endless night or
sprinkles of daylight
dancing shadows shun
a gentle nun
cradles your head
wishing you dead
inspiration fails
slowly sadly
baby girl wails
they turn away
end is nigh
they turn away
good bye
gently rest
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Tony Fiona
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gently rest
Last edited by Tony Fiona on Wed Jul 22, 2009 4:54 pm, edited 1 time in total.
" There's a race of men that can't stay still
A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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moonflower
- enchanted by the magic
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- Location: longview tx
Re: gently rest
i like the form this is written in..short concise lines with clear messages..enjoyed! 
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C.R. Ebowski
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Re: gently rest
i'm not sure why...but i want to read this over and over again. great job!
"Nobody can get the truth out of me because even I don't know what it is. I keep myself in a constant state of utter confusion."
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Tony Fiona
- Seafoam Poet
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Re: gently rest
thank you both very much.
it is good to write again
tony
it is good to write again
tony
" There's a race of men that can't stay still
A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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Wraith Chimera
- Clearwater Poet
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- Joined: Tue May 16, 2006 4:46 pm
Re: gently rest
WOW, beautifully done Tony! i think this my new favorite one by you.
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Tony Fiona
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Re: gently rest
thank you very much i am truly humbled
" There's a race of men that can't stay still
A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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jeannerené
- Winter's Rose
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- Joined: Thu Jul 04, 2002 12:01 am
- Location: CA
Re: gently rest
Tony,
I've read this over several times, and although there is a sense of quiet ... a restful feeling as suggests the title, I can't help but feel something sinister at the end. There image of a nun wishing one dead is rather jarring to me. Not saying that is bad .... I just found it interesting, suggesting to the contrary not so gentle of a rest.
jeanne
I've read this over several times, and although there is a sense of quiet ... a restful feeling as suggests the title, I can't help but feel something sinister at the end. There image of a nun wishing one dead is rather jarring to me. Not saying that is bad .... I just found it interesting, suggesting to the contrary not so gentle of a rest.
jeanne... and his words purge up and outward,
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots… ~ jeannerené
~breathe~
flickr -jeannerene photostream
expelled and onward through desert dust swallowed,
sands he says that gorge on simple sensibilities.
And, now he spits fragments, grit, extended vowels and elongated syllables
over cracked lips. Their sounds fall
piling round his boots… ~ jeannerené
~breathe~
flickr -jeannerene photostream
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Tony Fiona
- Seafoam Poet
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Re: gently rest
possibly wishing death would take the wretched soul to heaven?
loving the physical body and caring for the soul.
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loving the physical body and caring for the soul.
t
" There's a race of men that can't stay still
A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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A race that don't fit in
They break the hearts of kith and kin
and roam the world at will. " ------------Robert Service
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