I can't go on like this

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hope1994
Clearwater Poet
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Tag line: Stay strong
Location: Washington

I can't go on like this

Post by hope1994 » Sat Mar 01, 2014 10:33 pm

I want to be happy, I really do...
It's just hard.
Everyday it gets harder and harder;
The skies get darker and darker;
My heart grows colder and colder with each passing day.
I can here the blade calling my name,
My mind is telling me to cut, that everything will me better,
but my heart is telling me to be strong.
I just don't know how much longer I can take it.
Everyday it's the same routine;
Fake smile, fake laugh, and make everybody think I'm happy...
I just don't know if I can take it anymore.
Life is a war, and I don't think I'm winning anymore

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CamelToe
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Re: I can't go on like this

Post by CamelToe » Tue Jun 17, 2014 6:40 pm

Nice dark poem, I can relate. I really liked the end line
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before

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Eric
A Poet in the Rain
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Re: I can't go on like this

Post by Eric » Mon Aug 25, 2014 2:13 pm

We ahve some similar issues read some of mine I like this one
***Poetry Pages Poet of the Month June 2012***
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Wmartin
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Re: I can't go on like this

Post by Wmartin » Mon Dec 01, 2014 9:21 am

very dark, but it makes you think. been there, trust me. I liked it much.

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Eric
A Poet in the Rain
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Re: I can't go on like this

Post by Eric » Mon Mar 16, 2015 11:28 pm

I came back to comment again on this again because life recently reminded of it. I have, do and will always understand the pain, that is screaming in this write. Your ability to convey those thoughts for not just yourself but other to see. Well that just something intriguing about you and your ability to actually feel. Now writting because your feeling is says alot about you. Stay strong I forget to now and again! We all fake a smile or two ... helps keep the insanity!
***Poetry Pages Poet of the Month June 2012***
Author Award winning Blizzards of Thought A Book of Reflection March 2011 http://www.blizzardsofthought.com/Image

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