Rain Dance
Melodic staccato of rhythmic rain
pattering softly against the glass
of my inter-dimensional windowpane
bringing me visions that weep and pass
Pattering softly against the glass
creating a sound that others miss
bringing me visions that weep and pass
like star-crossed lovers who sadly kiss
Creating a sound that others miss
the rain reveals its secret heart
like star-crossed lovers who sadly kiss
and then by fate are torn apart
The rain reveals its secret heart
rhythms driven to belong
and then by fate are torn apart
relinquishing each separate song
Rhythms driven to belong
falling now as tears of pain
relinquishing each separate song
melodic staccato of rhythmic rain
C. Lon R. Bruso
Rain Dance
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Autoprune: 12-months
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- Babbling Brook Poet
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Re: Rain Dance
Your poem reminds me as to why I began cautiously, dancing between the raindrops, as I grew older!
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Re: Rain Dance
Well thank you, I think! LOL!!
- Travis
- The Transformed One
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Re: Rain Dance
I like the manner in which you wrote this; has a nice rhythm to it and you paint some great images for your reader.
~Travis
~Travis
The soul becomes dyed with the color of its thoughts. ~Marcus Aurelius
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Re: Rain Dance
Being a percussionist myself,...I can appreciate
.Melodic staccato of rhythmic rain
pattering softly against the glass
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Re: Rain Dance
My thanks go out to Travis and Bags123 for their kind and much appreciated comments!
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