AGAINST ALL ODDS!

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goldenrod
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AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by goldenrod » Fri Jun 22, 2012 11:36 am

In a sidewalk crack,
on a busy street,
a dandelion grows.
It ducks, it weaves
it twists away
from ten thousand,
marching toes!


That poor lone weed
spends all its time
staying out of the way...
Of high-heeled shoes
and workmans' boots,
to which it might
fall prey!


Tis the best part of
a fortnight since,
above the concrete's rim,
it shyly poked,
a tiny petallated head,
to take
the wide-world in!


Now it trembles, shivers
at near every sound,
all its leaves and seeds
long shed.


'Cos...by any known degree
of betting odds,
that erstwhile puffball...
Should be dead!
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by DarleneG » Sun Jul 01, 2012 7:49 pm

It' s beautiful! I loved it. Reminds me of the poem, "Flower in a crannied wall' :thumbsup:
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by goldenrod » Thu Jul 05, 2012 1:55 pm

DarleneG...

Glad you liked it, although most will still look upon the dandelion as a pest! :smack:
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by DarleneG » Thu Jul 05, 2012 2:44 pm

The dandeloin. It may be a weed, but not to me! I will always think of it as one of my favorite flowers because I had a son with yellow hair. He died of CF. So every time I see a dandeloin I am reminded of him. I wrote a poem once about what my two sons gave me for one mother's day. It started like this: " A dandeloin in a loving cup,/ was my Mother's Day gift this year./It was given to me by my two little boys. l wore it proudly in my hair." I can't remember the rest. But that was the best part of the poem. :thumbsup:
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by goldenrod » Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:07 pm

DarleneG...

The Dandelion has been O.K with me, ever since I first tasted Dandelion wine! :grin:
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by DarleneG » Thu Jul 12, 2012 5:25 pm

I never heard of dandelion wine. But it sounds good to me! :lol: p.s. I did a complete revision of my poem "Trolley Writer" in case you are interested? Do you ever go back and revise your poems? Or is the first writing what you stick with? I'm constantly rewriting! Never satisfied.
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by goldenrod » Fri Jul 13, 2012 8:30 pm

by DarleneG...

Some poems seem to flow off of the pen and never seem to require revision. Others are a struggle and need polishing when time and thought matures, or a flash of revelation shows a different word or phrase is a better option to express what I wish to say.
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Re: AGAINST ALL ODDS!

Post by DarleneG » Fri Jul 13, 2012 10:03 pm

Exactly! Thanks for sharing :thumbsup:
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