whispers

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Joehanna
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whispers

Post by Joehanna » Sun Dec 13, 2009 10:27 am

i am whispering
my words
into your ear
i am true
in front of you
but you don’t hear
you hold my hand
but you don’t see me

i am whispering
my words into your ear
and i am not anymore
the air you breathe

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nekot
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Re: whispers

Post by nekot » Sun Dec 13, 2009 6:30 pm

This sounds like it could be a song Joehanna.

The piece leaves me with an empowering feel - no longer being the one for the other, who can't see me, to use.

:hello:
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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Mon Dec 14, 2009 6:50 am

Thank you

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Re: whispers

Post by moonflower » Thu Dec 17, 2009 8:52 pm

very poignant and emotional..well written!..enjoyed :thumbsup: :grin:
inside each soul there is music...let the music play..

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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Fri Dec 18, 2009 6:02 am

Thank you

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Tony Fiona
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Re: whispers

Post by Tony Fiona » Mon Mar 15, 2010 11:57 am

wonderful expression of
when one is taken for granted
one exists and the other fades away.

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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Wed Mar 17, 2010 7:15 am

Thank you

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Debbie
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Re: whispers

Post by Debbie » Sat Mar 20, 2010 10:41 am

life is so like that..we talk all the while not hearing a word being said..well put dear heart
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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Sun Mar 21, 2010 3:48 am

Thank you

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Re: whispers

Post by karanamrao » Thu Apr 01, 2010 2:07 am

I like the way the pithy and cryptic expression is carried through the conduits of electrifying images.It's surely a rare gift that a poet is endowed with.Please keep it up-the verve and gusto of writing poetry till the muse exhausts you.My congrats for your stupendous achievement.

Dr Karana Rao
Written seven books of poetry.,and many of the poems are anthologised and critiqued.Won poetry awards like the Poet of the Merit Award from USA,and from Poets India.

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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Thu Apr 01, 2010 6:29 am

Thank you

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Re: whispers

Post by BeeJay » Thu Apr 29, 2010 11:26 am

Poignant and lost but reaching out ...still. Great stuff is often packaged in the garb of simplicity.__BeeJay
If the Universe was a little smaller , I may just be able to reach out to you. Copyright © 2009 Baru Gobira

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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Fri Apr 30, 2010 7:25 am

Thank you

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Re: whispers

Post by Laverne Pacquire » Fri Apr 30, 2010 3:30 pm

i am whispering
my words into your ear
and i am not anymore
the air you breathe

beautiful feeling and emotion, these lines contrast the rest of the poem.

I enjoyed the read. :hello:


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Joehanna
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Re: whispers

Post by Joehanna » Sat May 01, 2010 2:23 am

Thank you:)

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