The Truth

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Joehanna
Clearwater Poet
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The Truth

Post by Joehanna » Sun Sep 13, 2009 7:56 am

The Truth

The truth shivers in the darkness
demanding justice for the moon
Under our eyes it stands up tall
showing no fear when death comes to embrace him
showing no remorse after breaking all the sins
the truth stands up tall
But when the night comes
it shivers alone in the darkness
demanding justice for the moon
while knowing there’s no one out to hear him

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heinzs
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Re: The Truth

Post by heinzs » Sun Sep 13, 2009 4:12 pm

Isn't that the truth!
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Queen
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Re: The Truth

Post by Queen » Thu Sep 17, 2009 6:18 am

this poem is beautiful, i can really feel the lonelyness in the words. but the last line throws me off can you find another way to say "but no ones out to hear him" it's not as eloquent as the rest of the poem. but i really did like this one you could almost read it like a slow haunting song :shock:
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Joehanna
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Re: The Truth

Post by Joehanna » Fri Sep 18, 2009 8:10 am

Thank you Queen and Heinzs

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audiofool
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Re: The Truth

Post by audiofool » Wed Oct 07, 2009 3:16 am

Beautiful poem.

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Joehanna
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Re: The Truth

Post by Joehanna » Wed Oct 07, 2009 7:06 am

Thanks :)

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