Sthembiso

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Mpumelelo Rantsolase
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Sthembiso

Post by Mpumelelo Rantsolase » Sun Jan 18, 2009 5:14 am

I hear the words spoken lightly
The smile given freely
And the look shared carelessly
Yet as I approach
The words turn to icy shrapnel,
I take cover behind my manhood
I seek solace in my mortality,
Ye the shattered smile haunts me deeper,
It shatters all in its path
I cry for a release and beg for mercy,
Yet the look cares not about my weak heart
Nor my sensitive soul
It simply crushes all that I am
I am begging for mercy
Yet do you dare listen
Do you dare relent?
I wish you would
After all I am only HUMAN!!!

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Mpumelelo Rantsolase
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Re: Sthembiso

Post by Mpumelelo Rantsolase » Sun Jan 18, 2009 6:59 am

Sthembiso is a Zulu word for Promise, thing is I think in Zulu :wink: :critique:

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Twaddle
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Re: Sthembiso

Post by Twaddle » Sun Jan 18, 2009 12:25 pm

I acn feel the rejection in this piece, maybe because I am feeling it anyway... But either way, I can really relate.
Nice work!
One loses interest
in that
which bears no mystery,
And holds no promise...

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Mpumelelo Rantsolase
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Re: Sthembiso

Post by Mpumelelo Rantsolase » Wed Jan 21, 2009 7:43 am

Yes there is a lot of rejection in it, and thanx for the feedback.

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C. R. Leverette

Re: Sthembiso

Post by C. R. Leverette » Mon Jan 26, 2009 1:10 pm

:thumbsup:

Very heartfelt and emotional. I certainly enjoyed it!

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Mpumelelo Rantsolase
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Re: Sthembiso

Post by Mpumelelo Rantsolase » Fri Feb 13, 2009 6:27 am

Thank you C.R

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