Everybody’s committing suicide

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Queen
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Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Wed Jan 09, 2008 9:27 pm

Everybody’s committing suicide
All the crying rivers are running dry
Virgins dieing by and by
Everybody’s committing suicide

And we’re supposed to mourn and weep
Wailing sorrows, losing sleep
And now the problems much to deep
This is the reward that man has reaped

Withered away and dead inside
No secrets kept or drugs untried
No problems fixed or addictions denied
We’re all just committing suicide
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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poetgirl122
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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by poetgirl122 » Thu Jan 10, 2008 5:52 am

that was a wonderfull poem, I loved the message of how corrupt socity has become, it was a true work of art, keep the great poems comeing! :cheers:
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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Queen
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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Thu Jan 10, 2008 8:50 am

thank you :hello:
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by poetgirl122 » Thu Jan 10, 2008 9:09 am

so true. keep your head up, and your spirate high, i cant wait to read anouther one of your poems! :angel:
***Im stronger than the strongest drug you ever had. Mix them all together and i'd still be twice as bad. I know you wants some more.***

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by KayRaylee » Thu Jan 10, 2008 7:30 pm

Hi Queen...... :hello:

Very intense, awesome poem....

I agree, the world has many problems,
but hasn't it always been this way.
We cannot help those, who don't
want our help. We can be there for those
who really need are help. Many cannot
help themselves, the mentally ill.

I would think someone who is starving
themselves to death, is mentally ill.
Rehab for those on drugs, is like putting
a band-aid on the problem. Most are back
on drugs before they get home.
I don't have the answers, no one does.
I think, helping one person at a time,
is all we can do....maybe, pray....for
a better world for our children.

This is just my two cents....about
all it's worth......

Most excellent poetry.... :thewave:

Bravo to YOU, QUEEN....... :bow:

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Queen
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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Fri Jan 11, 2008 6:41 am

thanks for the great reply KRL, :bow: the truth is it's about everyone, not one person doesn't have some vice or some habit or some flaw that they can't stand about themselves. and the sad truth is that most of us just try to cover it up or pretend to fix it or not try to fix it at all. like smoking or dieting but not exersizing or taking pain mecation to get through the day or being a cumpulsive gossiper and tryin to make it okay. we all at somepoint say "this is me world, deal with it" and that is such the wrong mentality. thank you so much for your in depth replys! :computer: :hugs:
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by KayRaylee » Sat Jan 12, 2008 1:10 am

Hi Queen,

I so agree with you.

I would run out of paper
if I listed all my flaws....LOL
but, not kidding.

We should look inside ourself, first.
I think it says in the bible, take care
of your own faults, before you tell someone
else, what they are doing wrong.

I am glad you explained it.

A Most Excellent Poem, as all your poetry.
:bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow:

You are a gifted writer. I enjoy your poetry,
Very Much...... :thumbsup:

BRAVO....QUEEN......... :thewave:

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Sat Jan 12, 2008 8:32 am

:oops: :oops: :oops: i am humbled by you words KRL
thanky you! :bow:
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by C.R. Ebowski » Mon Jan 14, 2008 7:13 pm

Bravo....bravo
:bow: :bow:
"Nobody can get the truth out of me because even I don't know what it is. I keep myself in a constant state of utter confusion."
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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Tue Jan 15, 2008 9:14 am

thank you CR :bow:
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Thu Jan 24, 2008 12:10 pm

cr i just noticed that you location says "right behind you" that gave me chills and like an idiot i felt the urge to turn around and look :bow: :bow: :whip:
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by heinzs » Sat Jan 24, 2009 1:09 pm

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Queen » Wed Apr 29, 2009 10:54 am

thx for the bump heinzs
No one is free.......if you disagree, try to skate board down the street....

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Re: Everybody’s committing suicide

Post by Phoenix » Wed Jun 17, 2009 1:41 pm

powerful last stanza.
i wanted more!

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