The slow death of a good man

[blood_dragonknight]

The Slow Death of a Good Man


For what has felt as an eternity and a day,
I have been empty and broken in two,
Nothing could ease my suffering and torment,
Darkness grew within my heart and mind,
And nothing could bring me joy.

I sought out into the world of darkness,
I sought a release from this torture,
An end to this empty existance of life,
Something to fill the void and make me whole,
But nothing I found assisted my plight.

When I thought I had found what I sought,
It always proved only a temporary fix,
And left me feeling even more broken,
Increased my suffering and clouded my mind,
Until I ceased my quest for happiness.

For a long time now I have been nothing,
I blocked my feelings of emptiness,
I shielded myself from any and all pain,
I surrounded my heart with barbed wire,
I defended myself with evil and darkness.

A light in the darkness shining ever so brightly,
A beacon of false hope and a shatterer of dreams,
Shredding the last parts of my heart that weren't scarred,
Destroying any hope of my becoming whole once more,
Now the world should fear me, for I am the destroyer of all.



Opinions for a title, and if its any good or not, are always appreciated.

[Nefertari]

Destroyer of All or Eternity and A Day...might be good titles.

[heinzs]

Maybe "The Birth of Mephistopheles"... might be an eye catcher :-)

Cheers! Thanks for posting.

[nekot]

"Flipside"

"Coin"

"Dichotomy of One"


As far as it being good or not? It hits home with me. Catches a glimpse, ever so deeply, to part of the human condition and response.

I'm not much of poetry critique-er. Like all art, so much is subjective. One person's like is another's dis.

I have no disses for this piece...only likes.

[blood_dragonknight]

Thank yall for the title idea's. I'm learning, scary thought that I'm actually learning lol, that I need to title my poems based upon the overall message that I am attempting to convey to the reader. My reasoning behind that ideal is that my poems are an expression of how I feel, but we all feel different about certain feelings. An example is, somebody who's always been accepted as a person, wouldn't understand the feelings of somebody who's always felt rejected. But overall this line of thought is probly a mistake, because it narrows the audience down to those few people who are interested in sharing in, or are themselves experiencing, those same feelings.