Update 8-17-11
Revise, revise, revise.
8-17-11 Revision
Deafened oblivion contour-
Stairwell weeping yellow frenzy,
Keeping wet-paint company
During embers in decanters dim.
Parlors of maniac zoom,
Rinsing iridescent feathers in the first bright corner
For the gravity genius.
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Old post.
Study Of The Visible Light Transition
The day we met suspended
In the magic blue time belt
Hours fled, stood and left
Dusk became the empty jet
Charmed night of nothing yet
Smell the circle music well
Humming trace of friends and fails
Equal master of wicked melt
Verse bewildered as it fell
Along the chords wave in hush
Frozen hand, taken once
Stardust, change the color
Double claret, stolen brother
Elbows numb, authors hunger
Over time return much younger
Written years, better root
Savvy fane, dharma troupe
Breathless before breakfast
Not since heard of
The source of the essence
Conspiracy apprentice
Grown in contestants
Subliminal, chest full
Epic under crescent
Longing for a message
In the final sample ethic
Permanent down vessel
Couple the slumber of soot
Before the grand giver
Upon the empire nude
Eyes in flood, rushing love
Guilty of nothing in blood
Along now the finishing gate
Double luster beating paint
Quick enough to create
Crossings along the way
Shiver dawn reality
Finesse the endless prowling
Ovation keepsake
Keep the fight awake tonight
Open life and due
Hovering the avid bedlam
Fabric of the space and crew
Only ever realm for you
Planet trap the blue deal
Speeding trees and wheels
Wired aim is nothing
It becomes disruptive
Behind the work alive in person
Shines a purpose on the verge
Blinking into third being
People shear the lonely dream
No caveat left in to sink
Swing along the sudden spree
In the ever passing, piercing glen
Thereafter the curtains, kept clean
From the weeping yellow frenzy
Pure as gut can be
Permanence in proper company
Occur a common honor
Fine before the questioning
The oldest living conscience
A property, part of thee in constant
Character Paint [rewrite 10-1-10]
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Last edited by charles.degollado on Wed Aug 17, 2011 8:16 am, edited 6 times in total.
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Re: Character Paint [rewrite 10-1-10]
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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2011 rewrite.
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Re: Character Paint [rewrite 10-1-10]
This is more than a revision... it's a total distillation. From 24 proof you've taken it to 80 proof in one fell swoop.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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