There's nothing like finding a body to share when you're hurting and hating inside.
Intense, like an exposed nerve.
Revenge, sex and blood all taste sweet
Especially when they're deserved.
Chaos stops me falling apart.
That's the 1% that's real.
Nobody has been with me from the start.
Nobody knows how I feel.
I know a man, he's on a mission.
I know a man, he's got something missing.
I know a man, outraged by all he sees
I know a man, thinks death will set him free.
I know a man, a man just like me.
C.R.
September 2006
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On A Mission
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- Charles Revitt
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On A Mission
"Some will die in hot pursuit in fiery auto crashes.
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
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Re: On A Mission
I really like the way this piece reads the last stanza especially. I think the last two stanza's could stand on their own with out the first. Thank you for sharing. :)
- Charles Revitt
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Re: On A Mission
I like that quote
"Some will die in hot pursuit in fiery auto crashes.
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
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Re: On A Mission
I agree with Jadynara. The poem seems more complete without the first stanza.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: On A Mission
Which quote? the one in my signature?
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Re: On A Mission
Yes, that's the one.
"Some will die in hot pursuit in fiery auto crashes.
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
- Charles Revitt
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Re: On A Mission
It was originaly written with another stanza after the 2nd but I was Never happy with it. Though I may add it sometime. Thanks for reading my stuff. I appreciate all criticism wether it be possitive or negative.
"Some will die in hot pursuit in fiery auto crashes.
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
Some will die in hot pursuit while sifting through my ashes.
Some will fall in love with life and drink it from a fountain that is pouring like an avalanche coming down the mountain."
.......The Butthole Surfers
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