Classic, Sonnet

[jupe]

With care I’ll walk the landscape of your life
Till rocky edges can be smoothed away
Divert existence of set gloom and strife
And gather sought desires this new day

Resounding surf frees all these broken bits
And rescues the imprisoned wanting soul
While faint flames warm, renew again to fit
Dreams purify and reemerge as whole.

When sea tide’s ebb to seize despair en route
Ideas conceived will slowly come to light
Cast lines to draw your joyful thoughts about
Life surely will compound you with delight

With rising of the moon, unease will pass
Complete the warmth of you, a new forecast.

[bags123]

Excellent Iambic Pentameter Jupe. Not the easiest thing to do. I'm a little puzzled by your two line conclusion. Other that that,.... Way to Go!!!

[Tom Watson]

Most excellent reading Jupe! I am surmising that the last two lines reference the rising of tides caused by the Moon's rising? Regardless, it worked that way for me.


Tom

[poeticpiers]

excellently true to form but closing couplet a little baffling