Inspire me (Asyndeton)

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Inspire me (Asyndeton)

Post by heinzs » Sun Mar 11, 2007 12:41 pm

Inspire Me
(asyndeton)

Inspire me, O' Muse -
take me on that
magic carpet ride
beyond Neverland -
two million parsecs
through the black hole's maw.

My toes ache for black sand
warmed by Sun's flame
cooled by crystal sea
while rainbow parrots flash
between palms.

Idyllic Eden
inspiration's source
buried somewhere in the mind
without connection to reality
yet more real than life
to the poetic soul.

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Post by Milk White Chocolate » Mon Mar 12, 2007 4:13 am

Wow...I like this poem very much indeed! :thumbsup:

I loved the notion of getting away but within one'self to find creativity and inspiration... :grin:
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Post by heinzs » Mon Mar 12, 2007 9:31 am

Thank you, MWC!

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Post by nekot » Mon Mar 12, 2007 9:53 am

Milk White Chocolate wrote:Wow...I like this poem very much indeed! :thumbsup:

I loved the notion of getting away but within one'self to find creativity and inspiration... :grin:
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Post by heinzs » Mon Mar 12, 2007 11:35 am

It's a magic carpet... always room for one more.
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Post by northstar » Mon Mar 12, 2007 2:20 pm

:hello:
i saw the body of your spirit ..my friend
sometimes you scared me
sometimes i touch you..sometimes i love you

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wow!

Post by Graeme » Sun Mar 18, 2007 5:40 pm

This is beautiful!

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Post by bags123 » Sun Jun 03, 2007 6:55 am

Wow,... cool Heinz. Never heard of the form before,.... but it flowed almost like something Walt Whitman would write. Very unconventional by conventional standards,..... but lovely none the less. :thumbsup:
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Post by heinzs » Sun Jun 03, 2007 2:41 pm

Asyndeton - The omission of conjunctions that ordinarily join coordinate words and phrases, as in "see no evil, hear no evil, speak no evil."

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Re: Inspire me (Asyndeton)

Post by poeticpiers reborn » Wed Sep 14, 2011 2:50 pm

Flight without wings our gift from the Gods
care to share parameter my friend

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