PANTOUM [strict form]

richie · Post by **richie** » Tue Apr 04, 2006 2:47 am

Pantoum:
A French verse form of four quatrains that repeats entire lines in a strict pattern, 1234, 2546, 5768, 7183. E.g.,
I did this in the strict form

PANTOUM
I revision
MY LOVE

1 So sweetly she still encompasses me now
2 among those autumns brown tints of gold,
3 leaving only her smile, all the fates would allow
4 with my dreams, whose fragments once foretold.

2 Among those autumns brown tints of gold
5 The mighty eagle his grace could not compare,
4 with my dreams whose fragments once foretold
6 as he sweeps flying strangely drawn to her.

5 The mighty eagle his grace could not compare
7 with the love that still binds my life’s measure.
6 as he sweeps flying strangely drawn to her
8 in this firmament, I’m lost forever.

7 with the love that still binds my lives measure
1 so sweetly she still encompasses me now
8 in this firmament I’m lost forever
3 leaving only her smile, all the fates would allow.

Richard Taylor
revised
4-4-06

Debbie · Post by **Debbie** » Tue Apr 04, 2006 2:49 pm

BRAVO BRAVO Richie...beautiful...and love the way you ended it..

richie · Post by **richie** » Sat Jun 03, 2006 2:38 pm

thank you

Floetry Spades · Post by **Floetry Spades** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 12:54 pm

That was tight! Amazing, man. That's one of the most unique pieces I've read here.

richie · Post by **richie** » Tue Jun 06, 2006 12:07 am

Floetry that means a lot to me pal, i'm gratful for your reply and
very moved by your comments to this its a hard form to get correct in that the flow must be or look easy [which of course it is not] i am just changing maybe one or two words then let this stand.

cheers

richie

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