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goodbye [Triolet]

Post by richie » Mon Mar 06, 2006 10:22 am

Goodbye my bonny lass

So goodbye to you my bonny lass
Be kind when you think of me,
The days we shared now gone, alas
So goodbye to you my bonny lass,
Our love like shadows as they pass
dreams that were never meant to be.
So goodbye to you my bonny lass
be kind when you think of me.


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Post by Debbie » Mon Mar 06, 2006 6:52 pm

This is lovely Richie...and yet I felt a little sadness through it... :thumbsup:
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Post by richie » Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:50 pm

thank you Debbie, triolets are my fav-- and express all emotions
yes this is sad remembering the past


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Post by Shane » Thu Mar 16, 2006 10:56 pm

Another very very good piece, Richard

One of my fave styles

(I'd place a comma after the word "gone")


Well done, laddie :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

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Post by richie » Fri Mar 17, 2006 1:03 am

thank you shane glad you liked it

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Post by shawn2005 » Fri Mar 17, 2006 3:50 am

yes, this is a impressive example of the triolet form , it is a french rooted
form, no?.

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Post by richie » Fri Mar 17, 2006 11:35 am

thanks and yes here is a few examples
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triolet is a poetic form. Its rhyme scheme is ABaAabAB the first, fourth and seventh lines are identical, as are the second and final lines, thereby making the initial and final couplets identical as well.

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I feel with wonder and surprise
The hard, hard softness of your touch;
Then your bright, swift, and careful eyes
I feel with wonder and surprise.
Enough, for rage is sure to rise
If once again, and then not much,
I feel with wonder and surprise
The hard, hard softness of your touch.

The form stems from medieval French poets - the earliest written examples are from the late 13th century. Traditionally, the triolet has been a very formal style - and most usually were about love. An effective conventional triolet achieves two things; firstly the naturalness of the refrain and secondly the alteration of the refrain's meaning. Take, for example, the following by Thomas Hardy;

"Birds At Winter"

Around the house the flakes fly faster,
And all the berries now are gone'
From holly and cotoneaster
Around the house. The flakes fly! – faster
Shutting indoors the crumb-outcaster
We used to see upon the lawn
Around the house. The Flakes fly faster
And all the berries now are gone!

Thomas Hardy

Notice how in the last line the punctuation is altered; this is common although not strictly in keeping with the original form. Furthermore, the fact that the 'berries now are gone' has a new relevance; the birds are going unfed. Triolets are a reasonably rare form; but their concise nature is a good start for new poets. They are used more than anything in cards and love letters - their short beauty makes them a perfect gift.

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Post by Shane » Fri Mar 17, 2006 4:27 pm

I'm wondering about the pronunciation though.

Is it pronounced "Trio-lay" or Trio-let. I've actually never heard the word pronounced verbally. I've only ever seen it written

I'm assuming if it is pronounced "lay" on the end then it's more than likely French in origin, (probably is French pronounced either way I suppose)

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Post by negatvone » Sun Mar 19, 2006 3:31 pm

tri·o·let ( P ) Pronunciation Key (tre-lit, tr-l, tre-la)
n.
A poem or stanza of eight lines with a rhyme scheme abaaabab, in which the fourth and seventh lines are the same as the first, and the eighth line is the same as the second.

French, diminutive of trio

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Post by Shane » Sun Mar 19, 2006 8:17 pm

Thanks Nega :thumbsup:

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Post by richie » Thu Jun 08, 2006 12:49 am

:thumbsup:

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