You've got a hook in my mouth.
Your the last tie I have to break,
To seal my past in a safe.
I'll find new friends,
Maybe just like you.
I summon my last bit of strength for forgiveness,
To forgive all that has happened,
At the expense of self-loatheing.
I put this pain onto myself,
To secure my future,
So I can get out of this hole I've already dug six feet too deep.
I tear the hook from my mouth,
I'm almost out of the hole,
Then i forgive myself instead of you.
Now im in a hole sixteen feet deep,
And realize theres shackles on my ankles,
....Fuck...
Forgiveness: An Ass Biter
Re: Forgiveness: An Ass Biter
i love this the title is awesome, the hook visual is excellent and the ending is perfect.....great job!
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: Forgiveness: An Ass Biter
Haha thank you very much. Comments are always appriciated! I felt like as i was writing this up, there was a sort of comical tone to it. Funny how things turn out!
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Re: Forgiveness: An Ass Biter
really love the use of the hook as the restraint and the ending is great as it finishes it perfectly. well played and keep writing =]
thanks for reading!!! =] " ill never strafe, ill never wonder, all absence does is make the heart grow fonder "
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