Last Stand

[Kamasui]

This burning,
An Acclamaton of my sins,
Along a Mountain side i tread,
Cold and desolate,
Salvation cries a rainbow in the sky,
A teardrop; forms an avalanche,
I look unto it,
And smile.

[Kamasui]

Comments very much appriciated...

[xmartinx=]]

oh kasumi i love you. epic, the teardrop, an avalanche, its actually decending(the word physically) and is falling down, like a tear and avalanche. you use and manipulate structure perfectly and i will scan this website for all your poems, and you better belive the comments you may/will recieve. woop woop