Negligence
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- Clearwater Poet
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Negligence
I kept trying to tell you that if we didn't feed her, she'd evaporate
into thin air! like a bowl of water left out for days.
Well, by Tuesday she stopped squirming,
and by Thursday she stopped calling out,
and little by little she left us.
You told me that the atmosphere would drink her up
and rain her back down to us in a couple of weeks,
but we're in the middle of a fucking drought.
You forgot to mention that.
into thin air! like a bowl of water left out for days.
Well, by Tuesday she stopped squirming,
and by Thursday she stopped calling out,
and little by little she left us.
You told me that the atmosphere would drink her up
and rain her back down to us in a couple of weeks,
but we're in the middle of a fucking drought.
You forgot to mention that.
"Physical love is unthinkable without violence."
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Re: Negligence
strange one...
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Negligence
I'm with Heinz on that. However, I'm a huge fan of 'strange'. Most entertaining, Red. - D
An easy read is a hard write.
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Re: Negligence
Very intriguing read, GRR. Crazy concepts are always the best, and this is no exception.
I enjoyed it very much.
I enjoyed it very much.
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Re: Negligence
quite aggressive in a way. Not really sure as to who/what 'she' is. Possibly you could elaborate on that? and sorry but hahah :P xx but as before a good write
People are going to see you, how they want to see you. Everyone is different and unique in their own way. But the people who love you and care about you, are whose opinions really matter.
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Re: Negligence
thanks.
i know this one is kind of strange, but i'm glad you liked it anyway.
:D
i know this one is kind of strange, but i'm glad you liked it anyway.
:D
"Physical love is unthinkable without violence."
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Re: Negligence
definately strange... but i honestly couldn't help laugh at the last line... interesting piece though
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metaphorically can speak volumes....interesting
Old too soon, smart too late....-anonymous
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oh, strange says it
but maybe since i liked it so much i will just call it unique instead
great write, great read
but maybe since i liked it so much i will just call it unique instead
great write, great read
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
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...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''
Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came
Robert Browning 1812-1889
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
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...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''
Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came
Robert Browning 1812-1889
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Re: Negligence
I agree.........'she' could mean so many different things.........'hope' for instance.........Odd D wrote:Very intriguing read, GRR. Crazy concepts are always the best, and this is no exception.
I enjoyed it very much.
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