A hollow heart fills me
When I look in your eyes
How can I love you properly
When you wear a dark disguise?
You shroud glassy globes,
That lead to your soul,
In a thick veil of mist
Like a woman wrapped in a shawl.
Secrets never told are hidden
The heart that beats inside you
Aches with a love now lost
And you carry the burden of a fool.
Empty claims of undying love
Of loyalty and faith you give
But the lies shine through so clear
You realise it's something I can't forgive.
I'm in love with a stranger.
Stranger of Love
Stranger of Love
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I have a small suggestion ...
I like your poem!
for the last line above, perhaps change carries to "wraps" or Like a woman "wrapped in" a shawl -- you get a more vivid picture of the woman wrapped (hidden) in a shawl, and the "w" gives alliteration.You shroud glassy globes,
That lead to your soul,
In a thick veil of mist
Like a woman carries a shawl.
I like your poem!
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