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blackbanner
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Post by blackbanner » Tue Jul 24, 2007 11:27 pm

The air was so still
your own breath froze
the sky was turning dark
midnight at noon
the angry buzz
of machines filled the earth
as swarms of evil
enveloped the sun
and the iron clad
rain fell to the ground
releasing devastation
in black powdered form

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"so now he waits
in his own little hell
surrounded by the
the very things he came to escape"
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Post by heinzs » Sun Jul 29, 2007 12:31 pm

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Post by moonflower » Thu Aug 23, 2007 5:37 pm

amazing images in this! ..powerful, moving..enjoyed !! :thumbsup: :grin:
inside each soul there is music...let the music play..

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