Let me Sleep

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Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Mon Feb 09, 2015 11:05 am

Let me Sleep
(quintain)

Take me from this bed of tears
for slumber I do greatly seek
a solace from my daily fears
perhaps in His sight I'll be meek
for I am all alone and weak.

Send me to another place
Where sleep confines those dreams when I
had satisfaction on my face
and life provides no need to cry
My nightmare ends, and I can fly
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Tue Feb 10, 2015 8:46 am

I like it. It could be longer. :hello:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Thu Feb 12, 2015 8:22 pm

It's a quintain... that's as long as it can be :mrgreen:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Fri Feb 13, 2015 5:25 am

How about a number of quintains linked together by a common thought? :hello:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:22 pm

Sounds doable. Wanna collaborate?
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Tue Feb 17, 2015 4:52 am

yes,...I'd like that. Here's my second verse: YOur turn. :hello:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Wed Feb 18, 2015 6:33 pm

Love it... thanks Gerry! Now I feel "challenged"...
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Thu Feb 19, 2015 3:43 am

heinzs wrote:Love it... thanks Gerry! Now I feel "challenged"...
I triple dog dare ya! :hello:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Thu Feb 26, 2015 4:31 am

:shrug:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Sun Mar 01, 2015 10:09 am

I have not been "inspired"... :darn:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by bags123 » Thu Mar 12, 2015 5:11 am

Sending some inspiration your way my friend. I can't imagine a loss of inspiration while living on the Left coast. It's in short supply over here,...so use it before it starts going bad. Ever notice that bad inspiration smells like rancid goat cheese? :shrug: Here's hoping for a renewal, revival, of your muse. :thewave:
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by Lady Byron » Thu May 05, 2016 3:06 am

Hi,

Nice to read you again ! Awesome poetry !
Si j'étais Dieu, j'aurais pitié du coeur des hommes...
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Re: Let me Sleep

Post by heinzs » Sun Jul 10, 2016 10:09 pm

Seem to have lost Gerry's verse... hmmm.

Glad to see you on the board, LB.
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