Trout Praise

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Trout Praise

Post by wblogan » Sat Oct 10, 2009 11:36 am

still water
    trout prays
      mayfly's touch
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      Re: Trout Praise

      Post by wblogan » Tue Oct 13, 2009 3:52 pm

      still trout
      mayfly prays
      water's touch
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      Re: Trout Praise

      Post by heinzs » Tue Oct 13, 2009 8:13 pm

      Works either way...
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      Re: Trout Praise

      Post by wblogan » Sat Oct 17, 2009 7:42 am

      Thanks for looking at it heinzs. I thought I should take a lesson from T. Monk and drop the line that was implied anyway. You know, less is more, nothing is everything, or whatever impetus it takes for me to just shut up.
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      Re: Trout Praise

      Post by heinzs » Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:43 am

      Sometimes minimalism becomes too "out there". It is a fine balance difficult to achieve without some effort. In the end, though, it's worth it.

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