Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Posted: Mon Nov 13, 2017 4:27 am
I needs to be smoother 4,5,6 and any wording improvement. Any community suggestions are welcome. It is a dark hard piano piece, or will be when the timing is right lol.
Content
If my next breath
and my last breath each
Somehow crossed your lips
If my next heartbeat
and my last were each
In perfect sync with yours
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
If my last tear fell
Living its moments
Fading to salt your skin
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
If what I last heard
Was a sigh of passion
From your fresh moistened lips...
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
Laughing crying hearts
Would find their Peace
Melting in the arms of each
Content
If my next breath
and my last breath each
Somehow crossed your lips
If my next heartbeat
and my last were each
In perfect sync with yours
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
If my last tear fell
Living its moments
Fading to salt your skin
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
If what I last heard
Was a sigh of passion
From your fresh moistened lips...
[Chorus]
Every moment before
Could turn to dust behind us
While the world before opened wide
Laughing crying hearts
Would find their Peace
Melting in the arms of each