Fate - a long version

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Fate - a long version

Post by soular » Tue Sep 12, 2017 2:35 pm

I'm glad to read plain words but still
I get them wrong

Where everyone seems looking
for the moments

That longing and longed
mutual connection

In this incredibly complex world
lies what's just too plain

To even see everything cannot be
without heart, like bit of everything

Playing hide and seek
where nothing's hidden, all out

Who is it coming in and going
out of sight

The Sun that always shines
above the clouds

Birds are always singing
from the heart

Nature grows and glows
just as naturally

Whatever changes
keeps changing

Whatever stays
stays whatever changes

Breath like the wind
for the Earth

Breathe like a breeze
and let it be

Just what it's got to be
Fate or destiny

Flow together
and far beyond

Fully within the reach
of infinity

For more,
let it show and tell

I'm glad to read plain words but still
I get them wrong

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Re: Fate - a long version

Post by bags123 » Tue Oct 10, 2017 6:12 am

I believe we make our own fate,...but even that could have been planned all along. :thewave:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
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