Until One Decides To Choose

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Until One Decides To Choose

Post by bags123 » Wed Feb 18, 2015 8:47 am

Until One Decides To Choose

One should discover
other places
different people
other rules

Speak to mothers
on the playground
watching children
after school

Start uncovering
the faceless
passer by's
and desperate fools

One encounters
while out walking
when it's too hot
to be cool

Different people
Many places
Other views
that one could use

But it really
doesn't matter
Until one decides
to choose
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Until One Decides To Choose

Post by negatvone » Sat Feb 21, 2015 1:30 am

I know this is a few year late to respond, but Gerry it looks good to me.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Re: Until One Decides To Choose

Post by bags123 » Fri Feb 27, 2015 5:35 am

Thanks Jimbo. :hello:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Until One Decides To Choose

Post by soular » Thu Apr 02, 2015 3:50 am

I'm moved, bags, though I may not get the nuances.
Thanks much for posting this piece. :thumbsup:

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Re: Until One Decides To Choose

Post by bags123 » Thu Apr 02, 2015 5:49 am

Thanks Soular. Me either. :hello:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Until One Decides To Choose

Post by soular » Thu Apr 02, 2015 6:10 am

:mrgreen: Ya man!

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I read this again. This time I've got the message.
Thanks much for posting this.

By the way, recently I covered a reggae tune acoustically.
https://soundcloud.com/brain-beach/life ... ver-soular

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