More Than I'll Admit

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More Than I'll Admit

Post by bags123 » Tue Dec 31, 2013 5:35 am

More Than I'll Admit

All those years ago, when pleasure spawned our wit
With you alone, and smiling where we'd sit
The white sweater that you wore was double knit
I remember even more than I'll admit

All those years ago, before our love had quit
I remember even more than I'll admit
Not that I would ever wish to recommit
Good memories still survive despite your shit
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by kuperian4ever » Tue Dec 31, 2013 4:20 pm

Darn good write, bags123
It got me rhyming immediately
Love your poems
Their rhyme, they're meter
I don't see how they could be much sweeter

Ok, that's it.
I'm writing poetry to a guy
O M G
:lol:

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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by heinzs » Wed Jan 01, 2014 12:14 am

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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by bags123 » Thu Jan 02, 2014 7:33 am

Thanks Kupe,.....your response is unique. :cheers:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by kuperian4ever » Thu Jan 02, 2014 7:03 pm

That's how polite people say, Gee Kupe....you're strange
Thanks for your polite come back, bags123, just sayin


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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by bags123 » Mon Jan 06, 2014 4:50 am

I like strange and unusual Kupe. That's why I continue to come here with all you nuts. :thewave:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by kuperian4ever » Sat Jan 11, 2014 6:15 pm

I'm a cashew
Love those things
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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by MJPease » Mon Jan 13, 2014 10:19 am

Hello Bags, A pretty whimsical piece from you my friend. Take Care
Take me back, so far back, adjust this fate. Afeared lately of pen, in abscence of light. The fear I might stumble upon a plagiarized soul. Wipe this dark slate clean, regain my thought. Add the words that rekindle my depth of soul.

From: Summers Discontent 7-24-02

Sincerely

Michael J Pease

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Re: More Than I'll Admit

Post by bags123 » Mon Jan 13, 2014 10:25 am

:hello:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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