Teddy Maddy

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Dema
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Teddy Maddy

Post by Dema » Tue Feb 05, 2013 9:28 am

A fairy-bear has such big black eyes
And Rose flower-bomb on his furry watermelon which is such heavy size!
His arms are guitars made for rocking like rockers
His heart is Tinker-bell’s head
His land of outer-worlds those are “beyond” “human-comprehension” and are all-too-alien to us!
The bear has eyes within the eyes
His oceanic-perception and black raven wings are underneath his fairy-wings
His fingers are hand-guns both on his feet and “arms”
His love had thousands of loves and happiness’s
Only beauty isn’t so beautiful to him
Deadly dolls attractions of deception, deceit and even brain-washing-machines, those cutes hold!
They will steal his souls with their secrets, loves and happiness’s
Scorn Malcontent
Anachy Forces Of Darkness

"Vengeance is mine
Neither sweet nor kind
Vengeance is mine
Vengeance is mine"--- Silenoz

"I Serve To No One!"--- Kratos
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"Rule is to defy all rules to do as you please and please as you do"
"In defiance you find pleasure"--- Dema

"Future is black/white, waiting for the One True Love
Who will clear my blackness and show me light in the darkness." --- Dema

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Re: Teddy Maddy

Post by bags123 » Tue Feb 05, 2013 2:30 pm

I'm speechless! Well done!
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: Teddy Maddy

Post by Dema » Tue Feb 05, 2013 7:29 pm

bags123 wrote:I'm speechless! Well done!
thanks u i begin to feel down about writing thansk a lot for reading this piece!!! :grin: :grin: :grin:
Scorn Malcontent
Anachy Forces Of Darkness

"Vengeance is mine
Neither sweet nor kind
Vengeance is mine
Vengeance is mine"--- Silenoz

"I Serve To No One!"--- Kratos
Image
"Rule is to defy all rules to do as you please and please as you do"
"In defiance you find pleasure"--- Dema

"Future is black/white, waiting for the One True Love
Who will clear my blackness and show me light in the darkness." --- Dema

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