Melancholy morose moon,
Of which poets can whine;
Ruminate required ruin,
A wilted flower find!
Poetry poses poof
For creeps and geeks to talk.
Languishing loudly lewd.
Oh woe, let’s take a walk!
Ruined Moon
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Re: Ruined Moon
Interesting use of alliteration. It feels a bit disjointed, almost forced. I'm not sure where you wanted this one to take us, James.
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
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Re: Ruined Moon
just playing around, friend heinze
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Re: Ruined Moon
Glad to hear it. I enjoy "playing around"... lol. Then the fact that I had difficulty going where it was leading shouldn't disturb you.
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