In the middle of the night
I lie awake in the dark
afraid to close my eyes
out of fear the ghosts will return
ghosts of my past
pictures of the past
questions with no answers
and of what could have been
ghosts of the future
of what will be
of what i can do
but already knowing ii won't make a difference
So i like awake at night
alone in the dark
trying desperately to stay in the present
but I can't help it eventually
my eyes slowly slidding shut
Ok so first of all Happy New Year to everybody on the boards. Secondly I really need some help with this poem. I still need a title for it I was thinking Ghosts but it just feels a bit too much on the nose. also i feel that some of the terms I use especially in the last stanza is not quite right. i would really appreciate any input. thanx
still needs title
Moderator: bags123
Re: still needs title
Yes, an obvious title would be "ghosts". Perhaps something different, like "Fearing Hypnos", working on the fears of falling asleep. Not sure... Just a note, in the last line, the word "slidding" might better be "slide".
Cheers!
Aeon
Cheers!
Aeon
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