Days of Contention
Sometimes I’m left so very befuddled
Questions and answers both seem so muddled
Tears of rivers form filthy stagnant puddles
During the days (and the nights) of contention
Other times I’m so deeply dejected
Thoughts of regrets not left rejected
Fears like rivers congeal as dread’s collected
Poring through pains and frights I can’t mention
Still there are times I’m baffled and bewildered
Answers I question and thoughts unfiltered
Leave me reeling, off kilter feeling pilfered
During the days (and the nights) of contention
Days of Contention
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Days of Contention
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: Days of Contention
An abrupt departure for you in this one G-man. I didn't think you had any contentions in life. I hate contentions,....they're so bothersome. Here's hoping they dispurse for you and the fam in 2011.
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Re: Days of Contention
yeah , a rarity for me for sure...........so whatdya think is it any good? as i usually do , i started out strong and then couldnt figure out how to finish it and just hurried up in the end........does it show or ???
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: Days of Contention
Honestly,....it could use a little work on the meter. Also "befuddled" is kind of a tuff word to use to rhyme with,...muddled, puddled,....just sound too forcedgordy wrote:yeah , a rarity for me for sure...........so whatdya think is it any good? as i usually do , i started out strong and then couldnt figure out how to finish it and just hurried up in the end........does it show or ???
and artificial. You've got a good framework here IMHO,...but you need better building materials. I'd play around with the meter, message, and rhyme scheme a bit more to see if you can get a better groove going.
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Re: Days of Contention
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
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