Why I will not get out of bed...

[Jadynara]

i just can't do it
i can't... face them
the fighting
the tears
there's no room
for love
in a place with
so much war

it's tearing me
the leopard skin
on my bed
is my only protection
and as the shells
begin to fly
i find that the skin
is not enough

the disrespect
engulfs my brain
as i try to shut it off
the final words i hear
echo through
my empty head
and i begin to
envision myself in
those words
even though i know
they have
NOTHING
to do with me

they don't care
that they are
hurting me
i don't even know
if they realise
they are doing it
all i know is
there is no room
for love here
no room for
Love
in a bittersweet
war

[negatvone]

Ist nomination

[hockeychickkayla]

2nd nomination

[Laverne Pacquire]

jadynara

you''re
[indent][/indent]a soldier, get out of your freakin bed

depression is a major theme
the style is plain, the message is plain
for a free verse, i suppose it would work for some people

for me...too damn obvious and ordinary...
put some form or more creativity with this...damn, it's poetry not a freakin funeral home.

[gordy]

third nomination

[Jadynara]

Laverne.... i was 16 when I wrote that. Damn lol. You and I have very different ideas about creativity. Thank you for your input though. it's always aprrecisted and I love to get fresh perspective. Thanks for taking the time to read.