The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
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The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
I just don't understand your wicked ways
you show up even on the very good day
always uninvited and I hate being your slave
Jealousy
You wreak havoc on common sense
you have no boundaries, you have no fence
reason can't contain you, it's no defense
Jealousy
Good intentions don't mean a thing
you turn the innocent to the obscene
I hate you so, you sicken me
Jealousy
"What if" is what you feed upon
I think "what if he were just gone"
but it's nothing but you who leads me on
Jealousy
I try to put the fire out
yet you feed the flames with fear and doubt
I cannot quench your rude shrill shout
Jealousy
They say envy and greed are your kin
and you have hard green scaly skin
but I know your soul is dark black within
Jealousy
You rifle through my thoughts and dreams
sowing false seeds of insecurity
fertilized with unfounded fears unseen
Jealousy
Rage where there should be no rage
I feel confined without a cage
my story has you scribbled on each page
Jealousy
Your evil embrace I cannot slip
I squirm and grovel in your thorny grip
I loathe the sting of your poison whip
Jealousy
Overkill it seems at times
having seven sins of the deadly kind
at your hand alone a daily death I die
Jealousy
Of course you can't take all the blame
Your cohorts include both "pride and shame"
But the leading culprit , should we name?
Yes, call him "jealous me"
I just don't understand your wicked ways
you show up even on the very good day
always uninvited and I hate being your slave
Jealousy
You wreak havoc on common sense
you have no boundaries, you have no fence
reason can't contain you, it's no defense
Jealousy
Good intentions don't mean a thing
you turn the innocent to the obscene
I hate you so, you sicken me
Jealousy
"What if" is what you feed upon
I think "what if he were just gone"
but it's nothing but you who leads me on
Jealousy
I try to put the fire out
yet you feed the flames with fear and doubt
I cannot quench your rude shrill shout
Jealousy
They say envy and greed are your kin
and you have hard green scaly skin
but I know your soul is dark black within
Jealousy
You rifle through my thoughts and dreams
sowing false seeds of insecurity
fertilized with unfounded fears unseen
Jealousy
Rage where there should be no rage
I feel confined without a cage
my story has you scribbled on each page
Jealousy
Your evil embrace I cannot slip
I squirm and grovel in your thorny grip
I loathe the sting of your poison whip
Jealousy
Overkill it seems at times
having seven sins of the deadly kind
at your hand alone a daily death I die
Jealousy
Of course you can't take all the blame
Your cohorts include both "pride and shame"
But the leading culprit , should we name?
Yes, call him "jealous me"
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
I've read through this several times Gordo,... and honestly,....I'm not sure where you're going with this one. Perhaps some explanation might illuminate me more?
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
it's basically about "jealousy" and how it can eat at you and ruin perfectly good intentions.....to tell you the truth i kind of wrote it to the tune of "jolene" by dolly parton.....lol.....it is a serious poem though, i actually hate when someone is doing something good for someone and i get jealous and envious....so i thought i would write it out....hope that helps......if you have any suggestions to make it better let me know....one thing i am thinking might not be clear is the "He" in the fourth stanza . it is not refering to jealousy but in fact to the person or thing that i am jealous of. the ending is just my way of saying that at the end of the day i have myself really to blame ..........well again , i hope that helps, i rather like this one but those are usually the ones no one else does....hahahaha
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
Why would you get jealous over someone doing something good for someone?i actually hate when someone is doing something good for someone and i get jealous and envious....
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
it's a long story
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
It was clearer with the explanation, and I get the why you can be jealous of someone doing good.
Now this is just my opinion expressed raw
The jealousy, aside from overdoing a bit on the repetition, breaks the power of the words preceding it, it kills any reading rythm and interrupts the story line.
I would like to know what others think about that though, certainly that could just be what it does when I read it, it could be driving it home for others...
That said, not sure where the word should live, cause the title is great.
Now this is just my opinion expressed raw
The jealousy, aside from overdoing a bit on the repetition, breaks the power of the words preceding it, it kills any reading rythm and interrupts the story line.
I would like to know what others think about that though, certainly that could just be what it does when I read it, it could be driving it home for others...
That said, not sure where the word should live, cause the title is great.
The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
Jealousy
I just don't understand your wicked ways
you show up even on the very good day
always uninvited and I hate being your slave
You wreak havoc on common sense
you have no boundaries, you have no fence
reason can't contain you, it's no defense
Good intentions don't mean a thing
you turn the innocent to the obscene
I hate you so, you sicken me
"What if" is what you feed upon
I think "what if he were just gone"
but it's nothing but you who leads me on
I try to put the fire out
yet you feed the flames with fear and doubt
I cannot quench your rude shrill shout
They say envy and greed are your kin
and you have hard green scaly skin
but I know your soul is dark black within
You rifle through my thoughts and dreams
sowing false seeds of insecurity
fertilized with unfounded fears unseen
Rage where there should be no rage
I feel confined without a cage
my story has you scribbled on each page
Your evil embrace I cannot slip
I squirm and grovel in your thorny grip
I loathe the sting of your poison whip
Overkill it seems at times
having seven sins of the deadly kind
at your hand alone a daily death I die
Of course you can't take all the blame
Your cohorts include both "pride and shame"
But the leading culprit , should we name?
Yes, call him "jealous me"
"You leapt into the abyss, but find, It only goes up to your knees"... Nick Cave
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
well, your way doesn't work atall to the tune of "jolene" however it does seem to work both ways for me.....i need to maybe work on it a little more i suppose.......thank you very much for your honest opinion and your time
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
if said person takes the time to help someone out who really needs it but it takes them away from you for long periods of time then you might get jealous.......it certainly is a dilemmabags123 wrote:Why would you get jealous over someone doing something good for someone?i actually hate when someone is doing something good for someone and i get jealous and envious....
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
Under certain circumstances,...with certain people mind you,...I can empathize with what you're saying,....but rarely.gordy wrote:if said person takes the time to help someone out who really needs it but it takes them away from you for long periods of time then you might get jealous.......it certainly is a dilemmabags123 wrote:Why would you get jealous over someone doing something good for someone?i actually hate when someone is doing something good for someone and i get jealous and envious....
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart
Poet of the Month
March 2011
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Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
Your poem reminds me of Hafiz The Poet but I cant quite place it. But then it is these little uncertainties that make us read something a couple of times. ____BeeJay
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Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
belated thanks lonnie
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
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Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
I had to read all the reeplies before I commented, All Aces Gordy.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-
If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.
Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06
If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.
Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06
Re: The Probably Lousy Ballad of the Insecure Man
thanks jim
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?
---Todd Agnew
Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword
---Gordy
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