The Third Man

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The Third Man

Post by Altawell » Thu Aug 06, 2009 7:39 am

White clouds brought around
Innocent doubts
When you ‘gone’
To the
Other ‘side’
In a ‘moment’
Lost in ‘memory’
Lost in ‘time’


The first man ‘shook’ your hand
In an empty lane
The second man ‘gave’ his card
Among the crowed
On a fast train
The third man
‘Touched’ your hand
Brought a flower
In a ‘blurred’ dream


White clouds brought around
Innocent doubts
When you slept
In your car
Near and
Far
Your pale face
Gently bathed
In a ‘silver’ light
Time and time
As the moon
‘Stopped’
For
You
Every night


Your ancient secret of
‘Godly’ game
Suddenly
‘Born’ again
In a countryside
In the heat of
Unusual
Summertime
When the image
Of the third man
Flooded slowly
Your
Inner sight
Your
Dying mind


White clouds brought around
Innocent doubts
When your dreams
Became so real
Shaped miraculously
A musical sound
Into a spectrum
Of
Arching
Light
Telling the story of
No one
But
Your own
Life





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Re: The Third Man

Post by heinzs » Thu Dec 10, 2009 10:31 pm

I've been pondering this for some time (obviously... lol) and am still confused. I suppose I'm missing something important...
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Re: The Third Man

Post by Altawell » Fri Dec 11, 2009 3:47 pm

heinzs wrote:I've been pondering this for some time (obviously... lol) and am still confused. I suppose I'm missing something important...

Hi heinzs,

The third man poem is describing metaphorically a life of ‘someone’ between a ‘dream’ and reality in this level and after. In other words, the person in question is being unconscious and conscious at certain stages within a certain process between two levels of existence.

White clouds brought around
Innocent doubts
When you ‘gone’
To the
Other ‘side’

The ‘White clouds = knowing and not knowing’ i.e., the uncertainty itself brought confusion. The person was wondering about his/her own ‘thoughts’ in the previous level of existence, which now ‘appeared’ to be like an actual reality. The whole previous existence suddenly watched by the same person like watching a movie just as he/she was about to leave to the next level.

White clouds brought around
Innocent doubts
When your dreams
Became so real
Shaped miraculously
A musical sound
Into a spectrum
Of
Arching
Light
Telling the story of
No one
But
Your own
Life

The three stages passed through, when the actual realisation of a new reality, symbolised by the third man, started to take shape - but only after the second death, i.e. the ‘death’ of the ‘mind’!
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Re: The Third Man

Post by heinzs » Fri Dec 11, 2009 9:06 pm

Your synopsis is greatly appreciated! Thanks~

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