To "M"

[aldo]

Sometimes I have nothing to say
instead the words, just a silent sight
sometimes it´s the laugh, the smile
your charm, doing something inside.

But I know how far I can go
this path that I won´t cross
and in the end, maybe you would wait
wait for something that should not be.

And when the night is coming
I can not avoid that feel
you´re coming, and I just can wait
for the next moment, the next day.

Maybe you´ll never read this
maybe every word will be buried
maybe some kind of spell release this
maybe in another life. . . we won´t wait again.

[LostNight]

[snorple]

Sometimes I have nothing to say
instead the words, just a silent sight [suggest: instead of words, sincere sighs] you do mean sighs and not sight?
sometimes it´s the laugh, the smile
your charm, doing something inside.

I find the phrasing somewhat akward and although I sense the direction of this poem I feel it needs a lot more work on the artistic element in trying to express your concepts.

Take that second line in the first stanza, it has no real flow in what it sets out to express. Yet my suggetsion frees it in my opinion, maybe you want it to be akward, I don't know. 'Instead of words', is a norma enough sentence. 'Just a silent sight does not complement that first part of the sentence it is not related to it in any way to me. But sincere sighs is an alternative to words and so makes sense to me.

[heinzs]

I had the same thought on that line that the last word should be sigh rather than sight... good catch.