Come inside this poem
I weave with my embrace
my fingers in your hair
And breath upon your face
[Alternative lines] {Thoughts?]
Your breath upon my face
Your breath touching my face
Your breath brushes my face
Lead me inside the songs
In rhythm with your heart
And too that sound I'll dance
Long after you must depart
Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
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Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
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Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
I'd choose the bold italic line. I don't know if it fits but "Reverberation" came to me as a title.Mightfall wrote: ↑Tue Nov 28, 2017 4:42 pmCome inside this poem
I weave with my embrace
my fingers in your hair
And breath upon your face
[Alternative lines] {Thoughts?]
Your breath upon my face
Your breath touching my face
Your breath brushes my face
Lead me inside the songs
In rhythm with your heart
And too that sound I'll dance
Long after you must depart
I guess I was inspired by this poem or song to write one called "No reason". Thanks much.
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Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Hi, thank you so much for your feedback
This inspired you to write, that is so... flattering? Did you share it?
This inspired you to write, that is so... flattering? Did you share it?
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Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Reverbaration is the right concept but I feel like the wrong voice
What about "Resonate"?
What about "Resonate"?
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You seem to have got it so there's nothing more for me to say but how about "Resonance"?
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Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
That is it for sure! Thank You
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