**-listening to you breathe-** Poem of the Week, Favorite

buttterflies · Post by **buttterflies** » Mon Apr 17, 2006 9:01 pm

Winner: Poem of the Week: April 23, 2006

Winner of the Community Favorite Award: April 23, 2006

warning: this is a rather mushy poem...

'listening to you breathe'
by buttterflies

in the minutes before i fell asleep,
i suddenly discovered perfect happiness;
i found it in your breathing,
the subdued rise and fall of your chest
as i lay encircled in your arms.
in the silence that surrounded us,
i heard and felt only you
sleeping next to me.
the grasp of your fingers,
entwined with mine,
embodied my perfect joy.
my nerves lay awake and aware
of an unforseen warmth;
a slow understanding crawled into me,
realized it was your skin against mine,
softly breathing with me.
i closed my eyes so i could see
this perfection in darkness,
so i could feel this silent love
defining happiness for me.
in those moments before dreams
began to cloud my quaint reality,
i remembered how to fall in love again,
by listening to you breathe.

april 17th, 2006.

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Admin note:
Nominated for Poem of the Week on 4.18.06

rlnimages · Post by **rlnimages** » Mon Apr 17, 2006 9:40 pm

warning: THIS is a rather lovely poem...

my nerves lay awake and aware
of an unforseen warmth;

a slow understanding crawled into me,

in those moments before dreams
began to cloud my quaint reality,

Each of these are very nicely-turned phrases.

Mushy, sure - but the mushiness doesn't overshadow the poetry held within.

very sweet.

richard

Carl Berry · Post by **Carl Berry** » Tue Apr 18, 2006 6:04 pm

Bella Butterfly!!

So beautiful. It is very sensual, in all that is encompassed by that word - feeling, seeing, hearing. Like a moment frozen in time, but not cold and brittle. It has your style, your way of thinking, and that is a beautiful thing.

: )

palimpsest · Post by **palimpsest** » Tue Apr 18, 2006 6:48 pm

I'm not sure about 'mushy' ... but most certainly beautiful.
This is a joyous poem, wonderfully worded.
Well done, buttterflies...a lovely piece of art.

ninian · Post by **ninian** » Tue Apr 18, 2006 7:22 pm

delicately sweet - i love the ending....

buttterflies wrote:i remembered how to fall in love again,
by listening to you breathe.

at moments such as this one there is no need for words...

wonderfully done.

ninian

Friend_forever · Post by **Friend_forever** » Tue Apr 18, 2006 9:24 pm

Beautiful write 3T...

very lovely... your writes have a special style... the way you mix those words to have that impact...

great write

Friend_forever · Post by **Friend_forever** » Tue Apr 18, 2006 9:35 pm

I have nominated this "mushy" write for the community fav...

Go on to here http://www.poetrypages.com/phpBB2/viewt ... highlight= and second my nomination

and 3t doesnt need to thank me.

buttterflies · Post by **buttterflies** » Wed Apr 19, 2006 8:49 am

thank you. i don't think it's possible to ever capture in words a moment like that in its entirety, but i'm glad you guys picked up on some of it and appreciate it... thank you so much. :) ....and for the nominations... :)

GoddessErika · Post by **GoddessErika** » Wed Apr 19, 2006 12:40 pm

Aahhh! I LOVE IT!!! You have no idea how many times I've been falling asleep next to my man thinking, damn... I wish I could write a poem that would describe this moment perfectly... but, I have been unsuccessful.

You did it though! Awesome job buttters!! I envy you, but I'm definately glad someone did it!

... You're awesome!

buttterflies · Post by **buttterflies** » Mon Apr 24, 2006 9:30 pm

thank you, Erika... :) i'm so happy that you can relate to such a precious moment...

and thank you everyone, for the recognition. you guys make poetry worth writing.

Topics I've started · Post by **heinzs** » Sat Apr 29, 2006 10:44 pm

Floetry Spades · Post by **Floetry Spades** » Sat Aug 26, 2006 4:54 pm

Damn ...

Butttas, how very beautiful of you to pleasure me with such a poem.

Friend_forever · Post by **Friend_forever** » Sat Aug 26, 2006 6:40 pm

i still like this write

glad it go the fav..

GoddessErika · Post by **GoddessErika** » Sun May 13, 2007 1:25 pm

I had to resurrect it!

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