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Post by gordy » Thu May 13, 2004 7:44 am

Winner of the Community Favorite Award: November 28, 2006
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Verbal Love
by gordy

"I love You,"
He announced with a "Noun"
As he went out the door
And headed to town

"Love you, too,"
Said she, still in her gown
Her face forcing a smile
Refraining a frown

An obligatory call
Made precisely at noon
And, "Love ya , hon" and "I'll be home soon"
That's all he rote, the same ol' tune

Ritually the word
Becomes just a sound
Repeated robotically
Just another noun

But this night
something strange,
something new---

Hello with a hug and brushing away tears
A soft sweet, silent touch erasing all fears
Removing all doubts this day had appeared
That Love, (as a verb) said loud and clear
Everything she ever needed to hear

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Noun-----(a thing)

Verb-----(an action)


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Last edited by gordy on Mon Mar 28, 2005 7:33 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Persistence is my sword

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Post by thief of dreams » Fri May 14, 2004 1:54 am

though the slang write had me frowning at parts.. the poem as a whole is awesome and the message is clear and precise... i am in total agreement with the view and like the poem... still not too big on the slang type though.. hehe
i only wish that someday i can hold someone in my arms as i stare into their eyes and tell them that i love them.. no empty half assed robotic tone as i scurry out the door.. i would take time to hold them and let them know that the power of truth enforced the words i spoke...
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Post by gordy » Fri May 14, 2004 7:44 am

thank you thief......that was a very good critique by the way, thank you for being so honest and i glad you liked the poem :mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy
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Post by Jaysie » Wed Sep 22, 2004 11:19 am

omg, you wrote a poem about me!! lol :lol:

i loved the noun/verb contradiction. that is so true and a very thoughtful way to put it. i get so upset when peter does that to me; it's so routine, habitual. which doesn't make it meaningless... it just doesn't have as much meaning as when love is a verb.

quite honestly, this is the greatest thing i've read in a long, long time. thank you for that.
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Post by William Sabbath » Thu Sep 23, 2004 7:42 pm

wow, man. I don't know why but that really hit me something weird.
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Post by Hadiza Alfa » Fri Sep 24, 2004 2:39 pm

:thumbsup:
...and the passion in the song makes me gasp
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Post by JadedHopes » Sun Sep 26, 2004 9:34 am

Noun, verb.. you really hit home with this one. Great observation.
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Post by heinzs » Mon Mar 28, 2005 7:51 am

:cool: :cool:
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Post by Dreamcaster » Fri Apr 01, 2005 3:04 am

for some reason i think you picked the perfect words for this poem....nice write gordy...
" Tell me little starfish
if you have no objection
how do we know which way to go
if you point in all direction"
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Post by seventh » Wed Apr 06, 2005 11:20 pm

When the soul lacks for "verb" it uses "noun" for does not forget what it lacks. So "noun" is indispensable no less than "verb". Beautiful poem.
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Post by gordy » Fri Apr 08, 2005 7:55 am

thanks seventh :mrgreen:
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---Gordy
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Post by Friend_forever » Sat Apr 09, 2005 2:05 am

I love the way you have put things Gordy...

The Noun- Verb thing is great!!

I loved reading the write :cool:
And as I watch you in this light
I never realized your eyes were full of
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Post by Debbie » Sat Apr 09, 2005 7:40 am

Great write Gordy.. you sure have a way of swinging the words and meanings around.

Bless you for sharing once again one of your beautiful writes.

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Post by nacona » Sat Nov 18, 2006 6:11 pm

Nice job with this one Gordy, I just had to bump this back up! The style and voice of this poem is unique, and the flow is nice, I like how you have used rhyme. Thanks for sharing this!

Cheers!

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Post by gordy » Tue Nov 21, 2006 7:51 am

wow i got a sticky poem............lol :mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy
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