Elusive Sentiments

Love poems and poems of romantic interest (not erotica).

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Elusive Sentiments

Post by negatvone » Sun Sep 10, 2006 2:07 pm

Elusive Sentiments

Lost within this time
Tempered words sit within

These walls

Forged deep form the depths
Of where it all begins

Love’s calls

Starlit skies passing o’er
Whispering a song

It cries into the sky
This passion
For which skies long

A melody to strum the Heavens
Passes along our ears
Caressing along the frailty
Structure along like tears

Flowing gracefully into open arms
Waiting for reprieve
Barren in the desolate sky
Yearning to relieve

These open thoughts
Commandeering the mind
Captive to the hunter inside of us
Wanting for all of this….
A token left to find

Searching within this time
Memories of the things

Passed by

Division as sun hits the horizon
Transition into the mind
Gracefully hidden from plain sight
Where these lights fly

With fingertips longing
Over physical thought
Feeling definition
For all that has been sought

This elusive cure that slips away
Engraved into the sky was shared

Found within these forged lines
The sky has found itself bound
Held down by the stars that remember the times
When the sky would kneel down

Whispering the words for you

Never skipping a beat amongst the stress
No wondering if, where, when, or why
Just to say what I could read

Sitting elusively

Within your eyes
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Post by heinzs » Sun Sep 10, 2006 2:08 pm

Just to say what I could read

Sitting elusively

Within your eyes

:bow:
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Post by Friend_forever » Sun Sep 17, 2006 4:06 pm

Great write Jim...


:bow: :bow: :bow:


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Post by negatvone » Mon Oct 09, 2006 11:39 am

Thanks, Guys.

No worries, Naush. I have trouble remembering the time of day; much less the day of week, or anything else these days. :mrgreen:

Thanks for the replies, Heinz, and Naush.

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Post by Phoenix J. Star » Mon Oct 09, 2006 1:47 pm

:bow:

Loved it Jim :bow:
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Post by negatvone » Sun Oct 29, 2006 2:08 am

For which skies long
This line dosen't look right to me. Someone help me. I'm not looking for an answer, just a nudge.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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Post by Angeleyes » Sun Oct 29, 2006 5:48 am

A very beautiful poem, why does things long past seem to be so elusive here in the moment? :bow: :bow: :grin:

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Post by negatvone » Sun Oct 29, 2006 5:54 am

Help me with the line, then.

It's killng me. I'm a perfectionist. Might be you already told me what I needed to hear, but something is wrong with this.
Entering the sanctuary of my mind may lead to perils of unknown magnitude.......... hold on and embrace the ride. Feel the tolls as we pass from existance into my sought domain of twisted reality. -negatv: 5/05-

If I changed anything I have done in my life I wouldn't be me. Personally, I kinda like me. I'm an asshole, but I'm my kind of asshole.

Friends are what help me guide myself through life. I just have to find the right direction first. -negatv- 10/06

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just a nudge

Post by Angeleyes » Sun Oct 29, 2006 6:46 am

I still say "for which one longs" but I'm a woman and I see in the romantic light. :wink:

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Re: Elusive Sentiments

Post by heinzs » Tue Oct 23, 2007 8:31 pm

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