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A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Mon Apr 02, 2012 11:35 am



A cardboard box.
A plastic basket.
A dictionary...

The April sun shines
Through the closed window;
The shadow of the

Basket spreads across
The top of the cardboard
Box and onto the

Blue dictionary.
'This is the Here,' I think,
'And this is the Now.'


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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by poeticpiers reborn » Mon Apr 02, 2012 5:47 pm

evoked an instant visual of a lonely mans lair
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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Tue Apr 03, 2012 6:25 am



'tis just that -- and I'm the man, as it were; thanks for your perceptive comment and have a great day! -- David

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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by bags123 » Tue Apr 03, 2012 8:44 am

I'm finding your poetry becoming much more abstract in nature lately. Is that true? :hello:
I prefer to keep an open mind,....but not so much that my brains fall out.- Carl Sagan
Your brain is like an umbrella. It only works when it's open- Someone Smart


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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Tue Apr 03, 2012 9:16 am



It is a peculiar thing with me: I write in various styles. It used to bother me -- since I also write music and paint -- that I have no 'single' style -- but after a while i just accepted the fact -- and now i don't even notice that one poem (or whatever) differs so widely from another -- does that make sense?

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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by bags123 » Tue Apr 03, 2012 9:54 am

FirestoneFeinberg wrote:

It is a peculiar thing with me: I write in various styles. It used to bother me -- since I also write music and paint -- that I have no 'single' style -- but after a while i just accepted the fact -- and now i don't even notice that one poem (or whatever) differs so widely from another -- does that make sense?

Hey,...I'm not an expert on making sense. Just ask my wife. :mrgreen: Poetry itself doesn't make sense. :cool: I'm a semi-musician myself. Never dabbled in painting though. Good to know you David
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Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Tue Apr 03, 2012 1:29 pm

Same here! Thanks again! --D
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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by despicability » Thu Apr 05, 2012 1:54 pm

i love this
it's so perceptive in its simplicity and it's whole with such a soft ending that it never even seems to end.
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And so it came to pass
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it's a dangerous living this... life...

Did you think that the demon would possess us?
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Re: A CARDBOARD BOX

Post by FirestoneFeinberg » Fri Apr 06, 2012 7:14 am

What a beautiful comment. I am flattered. I am so glad you liked the poem that much. You made my day! Have a great one! --David
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