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Without Fail

Post by Odd D » Fri Jan 15, 2010 2:49 pm

Without Fail
By Davin Casey

Scribble, blind angel,
My fate is in your hands.
Your fingers feel sublime, tracing my lifeline.
I trust Time’s waning sands,
As well as your wise council.

Shivers in your fingers,
I felt you sever the first cord.
A slip of the hand, I understand.
You are, by far, still most adored.
My love for you still lingers.

That tendon has long healed,
And perfectly you etched my days.
Millennia, at last, within your grasp.
Then, without fail, I am betrayed.
My guts have been revealed.

It still remains, that scar,
But you nursed me back to life again.
All is well, although in Hell.
My features hide my faint chagrin,
For I am lost among your stars

again.
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Re: Without Fail

Post by poeticpiers » Sat Jan 16, 2010 12:22 pm

Intriguing piece of writing forcing me to contemplate what could have triggered off this poem
I am not sure I quite grasped your meaning although I feel I should have done
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Re: Without Fail

Post by kimmyjean » Sat Jan 16, 2010 6:07 pm

I think this is good....it does make me wonder what was in your thoughts as well when you wrote this....I think an old flame maybe that still lingers...

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Re: Without Fail

Post by Odd D » Mon Jan 18, 2010 8:55 pm

Poeticpiers:
It doesn't necessarily describe what triggered the poem, but rather expounds upon it, builds on it... Several feelings of anger, betrayal, confusion, and the likes were fed into vehement, gushing emotions in order to bring this all together, although I was only slightly distressed at the time of writing.
I don't really want to mention any specific meanings to me, because I love to hear inerpretations/opinions from others, if they feel like commenting. :thumbsup:

KimmyJean:
It's something like that, yes. I appreciate your sharing your opinion.
I'm glad you liked it and commented, thank you very much. :grin:
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Re: Without Fail

Post by poeticpiers » Sun Jan 31, 2010 1:08 pm

I understand it is not always possible to say what stimulates a particular piece of writing. I often puzzle over something I have written and wonder where it came from and why
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