Before I Hit The Ground

Forum for your general poetry that may or may not also fit into other forums as well.

Moderators: Spazway, moonflower, Gillian

Forum rules
Forum for your general poetry that may or may not also fit into other forums as well. If you wouldn't want your 12-year old daughter to read it, don't post it here.
Autoprune 12 months.
Post Reply
User avatar
JGarrison
Babbling Brook Poet
Posts: 363
Joined: Wed Apr 20, 2005 6:00 pm
Location: Poulsbo, WA
Contact:

Before I Hit The Ground

Post by JGarrison » Fri Sep 25, 2009 11:40 am

a thousand scents blend
and intermingle
giving the night a texture
a depth, seen only in metroplises.
massive edifices erected to proclaim
to the skies of mans superiority over his surroundings

the streets bleed forth sound
for the ever passing buses
and pedestrians packed shoulder to shoulder
on these squallid streets,

the velvetly sound of a sax solo
rolls off the corner with the passion
of night spent in an five star hotel
sweating between the sheets,
unchanged for weeks at a time

from ninty-four stories up
three million unfold beneath the cities glimmering lights
stretching for miles upon miles
bringing true meaning to the adage
"a shimmering sea of lights"
three million people falling in and out
of love, destruction, death, and life

none of the chaos floats up this high
no scents nor sounds
only the breeze blowing softly
from the heart of lake michigan
and you drink hard from your flask and ask yourself
could i make peace with myself
before i hit the ground?
“What’s in store for me in the direction I don’t take?”

-Jack Kerouac-

User avatar
wblogan
Clearwater Poet
Posts: 69
Joined: Tue Sep 08, 2009 4:17 pm
Location: Atlanta

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by wblogan » Wed Oct 14, 2009 9:21 am

:cheers:
Last edited by wblogan on Wed Oct 14, 2009 9:30 am, edited 1 time in total.

User avatar
wblogan
Clearwater Poet
Posts: 69
Joined: Tue Sep 08, 2009 4:17 pm
Location: Atlanta

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by wblogan » Wed Oct 14, 2009 9:23 am

:cool: At 94 stories, the ground remains only a rumor
It's reality comes with closer inspection :cool: :thumbsup:

User avatar
heinzs
The Fat Cat
Posts: 8406
Joined: Tue Dec 18, 2001 12:01 am
Tag line: Do no harm
Location: Novato, CA
Contact:

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by heinzs » Wed Oct 14, 2009 8:06 pm

It's not the fall... it's the sudden stop
**************************************
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed Be.
Image
***************************************
My Poet's Page Archive | Topics I've started

poeticpiers
Forever Silent Friend
Posts: 766
Joined: Sat Aug 09, 2008 2:08 pm
Location: Near Durham City UK
Contact:

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by poeticpiers » Mon Oct 26, 2009 7:34 am

hard question to answer only way to find out is by experience
Poet of the Month
May, 2011

User avatar
wblogan
Clearwater Poet
Posts: 69
Joined: Tue Sep 08, 2009 4:17 pm
Location: Atlanta

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by wblogan » Tue Oct 27, 2009 11:55 am

The poet said,
"Bungee jumping is all the fun of suicide with none of the commitment."
OK, so the poet was Gallagher.

User avatar
JadedHopes
VerveInVerse
Posts: 140
Joined: Sun Jan 12, 2003 12:01 am
Location: caught.between.the.landslide.

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by JadedHopes » Sun Nov 29, 2009 9:20 am

beautifully written. love the imagery. i thought you were describing new york before i got to the last verse!!
no limits. just edges. - Jackson Pollack

User avatar
BeeJay
Babbling Brook Poet
Posts: 355
Joined: Mon Feb 05, 2007 9:02 am
Tag line: A Future in Words
Location: Hyderabad India
Contact:

Re: Before I Hit The Ground

Post by BeeJay » Wed Jan 06, 2010 10:35 am

In a lighter vein: Grave Warning ! :bow: The Superior Forces of Poetry in the Poetry Pages, caution that reading this poem may cause vertigo combined with a rush of blood travelling downstream racing to outdo the pull of gravity.................BeeJay... Im reeling from impact!
A surprising take from an unusual viewpoint! Pun not intended.
If the Universe was a little smaller , I may just be able to reach out to you. Copyright © 2009 Baru Gobira

Post Reply

Return to “General Poetry”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 3 guests