Open Heart Poetry

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Open Heart Poetry

Post by gordy » Fri Dec 03, 2004 1:13 pm

Open Heart Poetry


The poet's heart
is no different than the heart
inside of you
or inside of me

The difference is
the poet's heart is put on paper
on display, placed
for all to see

The poet's thoughts are no more real,
random or pretend
than the very deepest thoughts
that are mine or yours, my friend

Most all our thoughts flow slowly down
out the mouth, time and time again
the poet's thoughts however bypass the mouth
drip on down and out his pen

So now you know('cause I told you so)
the anatomy of one who writes and shares
In the field of poetry, the heart is often exposed
So when you read, please take special care

You wouldn't take a normal persons heart
(if you saw it laying wide open and bare)
and circle the mispelled arteries or cross out
in red ink, an aorta you thought shouldn't be there

You wouldn't criticize a spinal cord
just because it didn't rhyme, you see
or chastize a red corpusle
because it wasn't type ABBAB

Just make sure you are familiar
with the poet's anatomy
before you ever dare attempt
to practice open heart poetry
Last edited by gordy on Sat Dec 04, 2004 7:13 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Post by Jaysie » Fri Dec 03, 2004 1:24 pm

/clapping

gordy, you're my hero! another excellent write.
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Post by the quiet poet » Fri Dec 03, 2004 9:07 pm

A fantastic write, Gordy. But shouldn't "before you attempt dare" be "before you dare attempt"? Other than that, I love it. :mrgreen:

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Post by moonflower » Thu Dec 16, 2004 7:58 am

simply awesome gordy!!..i love the message and how you compare it to 'open heart surgery'..the last stanza says it all!..fabulous piece! :lol: :lol:
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Post by buttterflies » Tue Dec 21, 2004 4:11 pm

hehe i like the idea of open heart poetry... a very fun read, Gordy. really enjoyed it! :grin:
"To be one, to be united is a great thing. But to respect the right to be different is maybe even greater." -Bono (U2)

"You have no choice of subject matter. You write what's in your heart and on your mind unless of course it's crap in which case it means you've thought about it too much." -Bono

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Post by heinzs » Wed Jan 12, 2005 8:40 am

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Post by Pope » Wed Jan 12, 2005 9:03 am

Lovely poem Gordy, but surely the structure of a poem is as important as its content. Otherwise you might just as well post your diary!

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Post by gordy » Thu Jan 13, 2005 7:22 am

im not sure how i feel about that pope......at times the structure seems important but sometimes poems that are rambly or seemingly unstructured can indicate the raw emotion of the poet at the time......maybe its all relative......im sure a poet who just has to get something on paper at the time of a very intense emotion or thought could come back a few weeks or years later and refine a poem and maybe make it better or maybe mess it all up..........but i do agree that sometimes people just write down "stuff" and its not really poetry but its real hard to judge that sometimes i think.......... :mrgreen:
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Post by Pope » Thu Jan 13, 2005 8:52 am

I know what you mean. We're back to that old "how do you define poetry" thing. I guess if the poet says it's poetry then it is, as Philip Larkin said somewhat more eloquently. Personally, I suppose i'm quite old fashioned in my definition, it's just my own literary influences coming through.
Cheers Gordy.

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Re: Open Heart Poetry

Post by recarl » Fri May 20, 2005 6:05 pm

[quote="gordy"]Open Heart Poetry

Gordy, I loved the way you expressed this. The poet wants more than to speak it. It is meant for ears to listen and listen again.



Most all our thoughts flow slowly down
out the mouth, time and time again
the poet's thoughts however bypass the mouth
drip on down and out his pen

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Post by nrip4life » Tue Feb 07, 2006 6:59 am

:mrgreen: :bow: :thewave:
Old too soon, smart too late....-anonymous

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Post by me and the king » Tue Feb 07, 2006 8:56 am

........NICE DONE

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Post by Debbie » Tue Feb 07, 2006 9:48 am

I love what recarl said Gordy so true...
supberb poem .. :bow:
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Post by bags123 » Fri Oct 13, 2006 8:17 pm

Bags "Gold Star Award" :thumbsup: :hello: Well done my friend,..... sorry I missed this first time around. I'll be 53 next March,.... and I'm begining to feel a touch feeble. In the knees especially.
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Re: Open Heart Poetry

Post by Milk White Chocolate » Thu Nov 01, 2007 12:42 pm

Gordy strikes again...
The more I read your work, the more I love it...

Very, very much enjoyed... :grin:
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