Poetry Pages

Woohoo!!! I'm thrilled to read this news!! I haven't checked back in a few months since it was down for awhile. I was thinking PP had gone the way of the dinosaur. So :thewave: that's not the case. (i don't do FB so wouldn't see any announcements there. :hello: ) Thank you Heinz and Mark! Hey my fr...

heinzs wrote:I wouldn't touch a word of it. It's perfect as it is.

Thanks, that's so kind.

That was fun!

Space You broke my heart when, you said you need some space You left me at the alter, I built for you at home You said let's just be friends, to the officer in your hallway You said you’re not ready for the commitment, hearing And I haven't stopped crying, though the pepper spray’s all gone Is not y...

I like this alot. It's a nice pace.

Heat Soaking you with Kerosene Kisses My tongue a flint, and yours steel My fingers kindling for the fire That started in my mind, so long ago I breath purposefully across your skin stoking the still approaching blaze critique, areas for improvement, it's really dense, so the perfect words/phrases w...

heinzs wrote:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Verrazano-Narrows_Bridge

Yup, it meant something to me after I looked it up. I was just commenting, certainly not a criticism.

when I found out what it meant I smiled.

This is great.

Very Nice,

Welcome

Seeking help in smoothing this out... 1. does it mean anything to anyone as it is 2. should the first two "of his father left in him" be changed to "of my father left in me" for clarity or is that obvious. 3. what would you change in structure or content. Thanks Curious. Remainders There is only a t...

Feeling darker than the bedroom that is haunted by the thought That I’m betraying all that matters in pursuit of what does not; Counting shadows on the ceiling that are cast there by the rain, As I lay sleepless in the knowledge that I don’t intend to change. I like the feel and the flow "Counting ...

I'd still really appreciate some constructive criticism. Hi Crooklyn I have some input. This is a fine little poem, compact and effective., Only one thing, Verrazano doesn't mean anything to me ? I looked it up. I think the reason you're not getting any response to your request for critique is that...

Sorry if this topic is covered elsewhere. I'm just curious to know how others come up with their poems. Me I can only write what I feel inside, thats why I don't concider myself a "poet". To me, poetry is an attempt to "word" emotions or feelings. I also write to "vent" negative emotions or feeling...

bags123 wrote:Wide Mouth Mason.

Carnival of Rust > Poets of the Fall

On deck

Sixteen Horsepower > American Wheeze (awesome lyrics)

Ok, why doesn't that work ?