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I have never read Randall Jarrell; thank you for posting one of his poems here for me, Heinz. It was haunting. I will look for more. Eyes Untouched, the last verse is my favorite too. Which will be carried away first, the memory of the lost loved one or the one left behind? I am struggling to come t...

I don't think you need to change a word - very powerful poem.

your vampire color for ink that i write with even now oh river of pen stroke across my page overflow with the first hue of the rainbow make a storm of yourself in our hearts then settle like mist to dress our garden I write with your vampire ink in a river of pen strokes that overflows into the fir...

I think it is metaphorical for our unawareness of the consequences of our actions.

I have taken Mightfalls' revision and played a little with it myself. i hope I didn't alter the meaning of your poem, Jake. But the fun of working revisions is playing with where the poem can go - so take what you like and leave the rest alone! Up until now with stars breaking through the darkest sk...

ah, yes, Gordy, but the truth about human nature is that without the vegetables we would never appreciate the glory of the fruit.

I love to read the extent of your spirituality!

this is beautifully written

I've read this several times and the second verse always stops me - I agree with Heinz. Perhaps you have more to say. . .
women with no power in religion?
nuns and priests not acting as good messangers of their faith?

Their liquid blood and solid flesh swollen and struggling ever up to assault the northern sea The rushing is a siren song’s Its liquid blood and solid flesh swells, ever struggling up assaulting the northern sea to the siren's rushing song The reason I chanded tehei to its is because i read ice as ...

Thank you so much, Heinz. I think I can do it now.

Well Done, Cyan!

Blackbanner, this is very thought provoking - I really liked the way it put life into perspective.

all the is wet and water

Did you mean that?

Yes, Mightfall, you caught the problem I have in most everything. If one or two words will suffice and babble on for two or three sentences.

I often need someone to cut away my excess verbage!

Nice to meet you close up Bee Jay!

Thank you, Heinz, I really like the way you pared this down for me. My feelings are no longer lost in the words. I really miss being in a poetry response group, advice like yours is so important to growth! My hear aches for you; the pain of losing a child is a sore that can never heal. I think it re...