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The first stanza brings in your sense of place/imagery and The last nails it firm within the readers mind. Excellent poem H just one thing In the daylight I pretend they are imaginary and I laugh with friends exchanging nothings this one stanza could be tightened a little may be something like Each ...

thank you Debbie, triolets are my fav-- and express all emotions
yes this is sad remembering the past


richie

Goodbye my bonny lass So goodbye to you my bonny lass Be kind when you think of me, The days we shared now gone, alas So goodbye to you my bonny lass, Our love like shadows as they pass dreams that were never meant to be. So goodbye to you my bonny lass be kind when you think of me. richard

The point is rather than keep saying, “I love you- you are my heart My soul ex” is to express such emotions in imagery otherwise the poem becomes a bore to the reader. And as to grammar the last stanza is way off These are only my opinions my friend to improve the poem And made in good faith Richie

The problem here is grammar and cliché words Regarding cliché words I don’t mind One or two in a long poem the classic poets used them, It is simply not overdoing them classic cliché words like “LOVE, HATE, SKY, SPIRIT, HEART, SOUL EX” are used By us all it’s finding the imagery to express say, “lov...

yes I agree its a good strong rhyme
I live in northen england so understood the drill
part and throw cable i worked on a rig [painting] in dock
while it was being built when i was younger.


richie

You have the basis of a good piece here.

Full of imagery and imagination, I found it
Strong in language and quite profound in its style.
I can’t critique right now but wish you the best with
Revising this. I will try to come back to it later.

Hello palimpsest No it was not meant as a criticism of this site. I have not read the resent Critique and when I give one now I don’t generally read replies before I make my own. I wrote much of this while ill, and remembering one site on which A lady gave the most wonderful but sarcastic critiques ...

Publishing poetry, short stories, magazine article's GIVING YOURSELVES AN EDGE Magazine information and recommendations “Why not try to get yourself published” Poetry magazines in England are not expensive to join And you tend to meet friends, join in competitions and they Are very rewarding. First ...

The dreaded cliché is so feared by poets they can get quite intimidated I just try to avoid the worst, and if giving a critque just try to tell them to cut down mabe revise a line with a lot of cliche wording. Again using imagery outomaticly gets rid of cliches. Poetry is littered with cliché words ...

(Dedicated to my friend Elizabeth Haruna.) ©Laura Bielek, May 1st 2005, All rights reserved. This poem was written with a deliberate rhythm and style by the author. When read with a fast pace it mimics a "jig". However, slowing down the pace of poem gives the reader the rhythm of a "waltz". In line ...

My Personal reflections on poetry with index of links, quotes, poems, and publication advice on short poetry [formal or not ] and general magazine addresses ex Introduction on IMAGERY/SENSE OF PLACE the most important part of poetry. This is only my own persnal opinion on poetry. First and foremost ...