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by Graeme
Wed Mar 28, 2007 5:49 pm
Forum: In Tribute
Topic: Ode to Your Hands
Replies: 9
Views: 1960

Ode to Your Hands

Ode to Your Hands Often we played “King of the Mountain.” Sturdy as a concrete statue, Hands planted on your knees - You set yourself. Powerful as a grizzly, With hands as large as bear paws, You laughingly swatted at me. The strength of your hands - Could easily overpower a little girl. Yet, gleef...
by Graeme
Sun Mar 25, 2007 9:37 pm
Forum: In Tribute
Topic: Daniel
Replies: 5
Views: 1267

Thank you all for the kind comments - this poem emerged from a very difficult time in my life.
by Graeme
Wed Mar 21, 2007 4:38 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: The Raggy Dolls
Replies: 8
Views: 2133

Do you mind if I play too? The tide shall gently caress my feet shall - omit - gently caresses Whilst I pick up a handful of sand. Whilst - While The ground down granite Shall glimmer; sunlit. shall - omit- glimmers Then the sigh comes... Perfection! I want it all To go as planned, To go as planned ...
by Graeme
Wed Mar 21, 2007 2:03 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Thoughts on Marriage
Replies: 14
Views: 3765

THANK YOU FOR YOUR SUGGESTIONS. i APPRECIATE THE INPUT!
by Graeme
Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:17 am
Forum: Funny Business
Topic: Convincing Myself While Shaveing
Replies: 13
Views: 2295

Been there May I make a few suggestion to tighten up your poem? Everyday I'll harvest (I'll to I) grey hair from my nose, then I'll clip both my ears (I'll to I) looking out from my eyes (looking to look) Each bearing it's witness (bearing to bears)(omit its) Now this is personal - so please don't t...
by Graeme
Sun Mar 18, 2007 7:44 pm
Forum: Funny Business
Topic: The Chronicles Of Johnny.
Replies: 10
Views: 1962

Snap Crackle Pop

I love story poems-
This is clever.
line four "though" perhaps "thought"

"Now I all hear your say" something could be done with "all" move it or eliminate it?
by Graeme
Sun Mar 18, 2007 5:42 pm
Forum: Form in Poetry, Classical and New
Topic: Re-captured (a nonet)
Replies: 3
Views: 2148

ouch

I hope you dumped the jerk! Powerful. I love concise poetry.
by Graeme
Sun Mar 18, 2007 5:40 pm
Forum: Form in Poetry, Classical and New
Topic: Inspire me (Asyndeton)
Replies: 9
Views: 3748

wow!

This is beautiful!
by Graeme
Sun Mar 18, 2007 5:36 pm
Forum: Form in Poetry, Classical and New
Topic: The Years of Hard Work Are Finally Done (villanelle)
Replies: 11
Views: 3737

The Years of Hard Work Are Finally Done (villanelle)

The Years of Hard Work Are Finally Done The years of hard work are finally done Our children have all grown and moved away We can look forward to having some fun. Searching for our treasures has just begun Obtaining necessities is passe The years of hard work are finally done. We don't have to answe...
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 9:26 pm
Forum: Form in Poetry, Classical and New
Topic: Sunday Love at Sixteen (sestina)
Replies: 4
Views: 2177

Thank you
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 5:56 pm
Forum: In Tribute
Topic: Daniel
Replies: 5
Views: 1267

Daniel

Monument Home from Washington color photos in hand, Our daughter describes the Vietnam Wall in stirring detail. Row-upon-row of names etched in shining black granite. The tear stained reflection of a man tracing an inscription. A single rose placed beneath a name. Nowhere on that list will she find ...
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 5:49 pm
Forum: Funny Business
Topic: Bubble Trouble
Replies: 4
Views: 1441

GREAT fUN!
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 4:35 pm
Forum: Form in Poetry, Classical and New
Topic: Sunday Love at Sixteen (sestina)
Replies: 4
Views: 2177

Sunday Love at Sixteen (sestina)

Sunday Love at Sixteen He takes me for a summer Sunday drive in his candy apple, red 1960 Chevy convertible, through the “Emerald Necklace” known as Cleveland Metropolitan Park. He’s a notorious one-armed bandit at his best as he gropes until a hand finds my breast. I cuddle close. This must be love...
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 3:29 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Thoughts on Marriage
Replies: 14
Views: 3765

Thoughts on Marriage

Thoughts on Marriage Marriage is... a silken umbilical cord binding two alien species on a mutually created island fighting for survival with heart-honed tools Marriage is... an open wound a scratch that will not heal. For the sake of love you gouge the gash deeper until you fall into it Marriage is...
by Graeme
Sat Mar 17, 2007 3:20 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Tree of Life
Replies: 7
Views: 2472

Tree of Life A single tree stands in a meadow Naked limbs shows nothing to hide (limbs-plural; shows -singular) With a rhythmic seasons leading to buds (while rhythmic seasons lead. . .) Wakening wildlife coincides (Awakening wildlife) Young leaves, leans toward nourishment's (lean) (nourishment) Ya...

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