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i love the way you structered the poem and it has a very good point to it! well done

is it true are you gone from this horrid place of which you called fate that last breath you took took the sun the moon my love an yet it still shines like your eyes always bright this place so cold filled with empty words your words fill it no longer you make me wish the sun didnt shine moon didnt ...

tiny crystals fall
dripping from above
soak my skin
make me one with gentle grass
wind does blow
thunder does come
a heaviness to bear
trees whisper gentle calls
as i watch with eager eyes
tiny crystals do no harm
soak me with god's peace tonight

its a very good point you have but it feels like the poem is very cut up

Flag goes up and back around slash smile forever in place mouth forms empty words of hope need want slash notes float about as the ball goes in flag goes up and back around slash alone the girl stands to watch her love the forbiden one slash the feeling envelops her like the thickest thorns the thou...

what do you mean by strange?

very nice poem. perdonally i would have made it not general and more seep i suppose or personal is a better word but overall cool!

the mirror only shows skin deep
light shining on perfect skin ... but is it real?
heels standing 6 inches talll.. graceful is the attack
breathe out breathe in and look inside the cracks
your inperfections are sitting in front of you

heheh thx i randomly write all of my stuff and i will deff. format my lines beta!

pretty angels. broken wings ... sing the tainted lulaby of my dreams... black skies fade with empty tears... wash away with empty hopes... stuck in the ground to watch the pretty birdies sing... as black skies fade to white.