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- Tue Feb 01, 2011 12:24 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4087
Re: Twilight's Leftovers
It's totally okay! I hadn't said anything one way or the other so can't blame you! ;)
- Tue Feb 01, 2011 9:34 am
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4087
Re: Twilight's Leftovers
Juniper this is awesome! As a lover of the night I found it very easy to understand and sympathize with the writer. Kicking ass brother! :thumbsup: Thanks so much, thief! Very glad you were able to understand and sympathize. Much appreciated. :) and btw, "sister" would be more appropriate :lol: Bag...
- Wed Jan 26, 2011 4:18 pm
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: A Few Days Shy of New Year's Day
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1294
A Few Days Shy of New Year's Day
A few days shy of New Year’s Day, the air felt calm but expectant A rumbling fog covered Staten Island; droplets of water clung to bare branches as the night slowly exhaled. I stepped out to breathe in the scent of a long forgotten night as it wound up my body; its invisible ringlets tugging at me, ...
- Thu Jan 13, 2011 6:03 pm
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: There'll Always Be We Two
- Replies: 22
- Views: 9556
Re: There'll Always Be We Two
You are both very lucky, as you clearly realize. :)
- Thu Jan 13, 2011 11:02 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: words
- Replies: 14
- Views: 8105
Re: words
I loved this poem, Despicability. Absolutely loved it. In your very choice of sparsity, you have said so much. It made me smile, and it made me acknowledge that you are so right. :) Delightful read.
- Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:57 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: This Timless Bought
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1263
- Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:56 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: My Wife
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2287
Re: My Wife
Beautiful sonnet! And very impressive that you master this form so well. Lovely.
- Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:53 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: There'll Always Be We Two
- Replies: 22
- Views: 9556
Re: There'll Always Be We Two
This is such a charming poem!! And I hope marriage may be as lovely to me as it seems to have been for you! :) I particularly loved the idea of "intertwining with intersecting views"... Even if those views are opposing, they DO intersect... a really lovely poem, Bags.
- Mon Jan 10, 2011 9:01 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: Mother (Shattered Trees)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3132
Re: Mother (Shattered Trees)
I searched for your work since you commented on mine, and I am so very, very impressed! Like one person already said, I'm sure the metaphors go far deeper than I can imagine. This is really an admirable piece of work! You made the rhythmic structure flow so flawlessly - did it take a lot of work, or...
- Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:52 am
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Cliftonville
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2487
Re: Cliftonville
This is really beautiful... and tugged at my heart. I think the particular beauty of poetry is the reader almost always comes away with a meaning probably entirely unlike what prompted the writer to write it in the first place. This one reminded me of some painful memories I can't seem to ever bury....
- Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:49 am
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: The Garden
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2206
Re: The Garden
Aw this is very sweet. I enjoyed it :)
- Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:42 am
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4087
Re: Twilight's Leftovers
Thank you both for your thoughts and critiques :) Gordy, you are right, but I did also do that intentionally. Yes in a grammatical sense, ending with a preposition isn't quite right, but I did that intentionally - poetic license, I suppose ;) The "I looked out of" at the end of the stanza sort of ga...
- Wed Jan 05, 2011 3:15 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4087
Twilight's Leftovers
Twilight’s Leftovers Towards the end of day, Twilight roamed, lifting street corners, stepping over puddles It came softly enough, but left a scar behind. It left a persistent darkness, cloaked over the city. It clouded the buildings, entirely covered the windows I looked out of. No lights flickered...