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by juniper
Tue Feb 01, 2011 12:24 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
Replies: 9
Views: 4087

Re: Twilight's Leftovers

:lol: :lol: It's totally okay! I hadn't said anything one way or the other so can't blame you! ;)
by juniper
Tue Feb 01, 2011 9:34 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
Replies: 9
Views: 4087

Re: Twilight's Leftovers

Juniper this is awesome! As a lover of the night I found it very easy to understand and sympathize with the writer. Kicking ass brother! :thumbsup: Thanks so much, thief! Very glad you were able to understand and sympathize. Much appreciated. :) and btw, "sister" would be more appropriate :lol: Bag...
by juniper
Wed Jan 26, 2011 4:18 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: A Few Days Shy of New Year's Day
Replies: 1
Views: 1294

A Few Days Shy of New Year's Day

A few days shy of New Year’s Day, the air felt calm but expectant A rumbling fog covered Staten Island; droplets of water clung to bare branches as the night slowly exhaled. I stepped out to breathe in the scent of a long forgotten night as it wound up my body; its invisible ringlets tugging at me, ...
by juniper
Thu Jan 13, 2011 6:03 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: There'll Always Be We Two
Replies: 22
Views: 9556

Re: There'll Always Be We Two

You are both very lucky, as you clearly realize. :) :cheers:
by juniper
Thu Jan 13, 2011 11:02 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: words
Replies: 14
Views: 8105

Re: words

I loved this poem, Despicability. Absolutely loved it. In your very choice of sparsity, you have said so much. It made me smile, and it made me acknowledge that you are so right. :) Delightful read. :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
by juniper
Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:57 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: This Timless Bought
Replies: 1
Views: 1263

Re: This Timless Bought

:thumbsup:
by juniper
Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:56 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: My Wife
Replies: 4
Views: 2287

Re: My Wife

Beautiful sonnet! And very impressive that you master this form so well. Lovely.
by juniper
Thu Jan 13, 2011 10:53 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: There'll Always Be We Two
Replies: 22
Views: 9556

Re: There'll Always Be We Two

This is such a charming poem!! And I hope marriage may be as lovely to me as it seems to have been for you! :) I particularly loved the idea of "intertwining with intersecting views"... Even if those views are opposing, they DO intersect... a really lovely poem, Bags.
by juniper
Mon Jan 10, 2011 9:01 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Mother (Shattered Trees)
Replies: 8
Views: 3132

Re: Mother (Shattered Trees)

I searched for your work since you commented on mine, and I am so very, very impressed! Like one person already said, I'm sure the metaphors go far deeper than I can imagine. This is really an admirable piece of work! You made the rhythmic structure flow so flawlessly - did it take a lot of work, or...
by juniper
Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:52 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Cliftonville
Replies: 3
Views: 2487

Re: Cliftonville

This is really beautiful... and tugged at my heart. I think the particular beauty of poetry is the reader almost always comes away with a meaning probably entirely unlike what prompted the writer to write it in the first place. This one reminded me of some painful memories I can't seem to ever bury....
by juniper
Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:49 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: The Garden
Replies: 3
Views: 2206

Re: The Garden

Aw this is very sweet. I enjoyed it :)
by juniper
Mon Jan 10, 2011 8:42 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
Replies: 9
Views: 4087

Re: Twilight's Leftovers

Thank you both for your thoughts and critiques :) Gordy, you are right, but I did also do that intentionally. Yes in a grammatical sense, ending with a preposition isn't quite right, but I did that intentionally - poetic license, I suppose ;) The "I looked out of" at the end of the stanza sort of ga...
by juniper
Wed Jan 05, 2011 3:15 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Twilight's Leftovers
Replies: 9
Views: 4087

Twilight's Leftovers

Twilight’s Leftovers Towards the end of day, Twilight roamed, lifting street corners, stepping over puddles It came softly enough, but left a scar behind. It left a persistent darkness, cloaked over the city. It clouded the buildings, entirely covered the windows I looked out of. No lights flickered...

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